Some parents forbid young children from owning smartphones (cell phones with Internet
access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in
touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
In my opinion, it is absolutely the wrong idea for parents to allow their children to have
smart phones. They are immensely distracting, expensive, and unhealthy.
Cell phones have the power to distract young students from school work. Rather than
paying attention in class, students try to sneak opportunities to play on their phones.
Instead of thinking about schoolwork, they obsessively text each other and try to check
sites like Facebook. This takes time away from valuable studying. This is a problem both
during school and afterwards, when youngsters should be working on their homework.
At the same time, smart phones can be extremely costly. Many plans require parents to
pay abusively high monthly rates. At times, these rates can climb even higher if children
use too much data due to things like downloading songs on the Internet. Rather than
wasting money on a phone, parents should use the funds on better causes, like tutors for
their children, or a home computer on which supervised learning can take place.
Finally, smart phones can be dangerous for young children. We are still unsure medically
what the long term effects of exposure to cell phones are, particularly on vulnerable
groups such as children. It would be better to be safe than sorry. The less exposure
children have to potential toxins, the better. At the same time, kids are sometimes
targeted on social media sites by dangerous strangers. If parents allow young children to
have smart phones, it might be difficult to protect them in the long term from these kinds
of threats.
While older children may sometimes need them to stay in touch with their parents due to
their many obligations outside of the house after school, there is little cause for younger
children to own them. Parents should encourage their children to read and think in their
spare time, developing their minds. Smartphones are unhelpful when it comes to this
goal.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 10, column 9, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, if, may, so, still, while, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1646.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 320.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14375 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48495472796 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.584375 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 477.9 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.1666163522 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.3 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.9 5.45110844103 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 22.0 4.53405017921 485% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210766270701 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0624225348126 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0448914619792 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.061837979581 0.150856017488 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0428153753478 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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