Some parents forbid young children from owning smartphones (cell phones with Internet
access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in
touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
According to me, it would be beneficial to provide smartphone to young children, however this issues is not so simple to determine the benefit on single factor. There are different aspect to this issue which shall be evaluated to make a proper decision.
I think it is beneficial to give young children smartphone as it opens access to lots of information that would help in development of those children. Having unlimited access to new information via internet helps to encourage their curiosity and enriches their growth. There is a lot of information on sciences, languages, learning which are explained in proper fashion to young minds. Considering these opportunities, it is beneficial for young children to have smartphones.
However, on contrary to that, smartphone connected to the internet has lots of information on topics that might be detrimental. Unrestricted access to internet might also give them access to brainwashing agendas to certain groups, mis-information on controversial topics. There are different websites which aggrandize self-harm, a recent game named as "blue whale" is a prime example of negative effects of having smartphone.
In addition to that, smartphone promotes banter and confusion. Connections are maintained via communication applications, sharing photos, texts. This involves a lot of social signaling. Social signaling is important part of lives of young children as they are going through an age of self discovery where they might not understand what should they do. This also brings complication of how information spread across the social groups young children tend to form via electronic media. Rapid forms of communication usually promote spreading of canard, which might prove to be negative for the social group.
To sum it up, providing smartphone to young children might have some positives, but considering the negatives in terms of possibility of brainwashing, mis-information and confusion in such a tender age, we can conclude that it is better to deny access to smartphones. Even if smartphone is provided, it shall be locked down to show content appropriate for that age group.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: ACCORDING_TO_ME[1]
Message: This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using 'in my opinion' or 'I think'.
Suggestion: In my opinion; I think
According to me, it would be beneficial to provide smar...
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Line 1, column 182, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'aspects'?
Suggestion: aspects
...t on single factor. There are different aspect to this issue which shall be evaluated ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, as to, i think, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1816.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 334.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4371257485 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18538110784 2.67179642975 119% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547904191617 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.4558626751 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.823529412 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6470588235 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.23529411765 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156823327341 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.051283684109 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0439619173225 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0871166130164 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0364030194844 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 10.9000537634 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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