Some parents forbid young children from owning smartphones (cell phones with Internet
access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in
touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
Smartphones are prevalent in today's era and have become a part and parcel of our lives. From waking up in the morning with its alarm feature
to making video calls across the globe anywhere, it has occupied a very crucial role in our lives. Calculations, online purchases, emails and other
features enabled in smart phones make our lives easier. While I agree with all the benefits that are gained by having a smartphone, it is a necessary evil in
student's life. In order to explicate and elucidate my stand I would like to put forth some illustrations and reasons.
Firstly, modern times bring modern problems and necessitate the solutions to cope up. I today's era, where most of the learning is coming from internet and all the
apps which are used to prepare for exams, the students need this exposure to compete with each other. To illustrate this, let us thake the example of the student who is
using Maghoosh app to study for TOEFEl and the other who is using the premitive way of taking the printout and carrying the list of vocab words. The student using the application
can use it anywhere, while at work, while playing or whenever he gets time and that too with the timer feature. While the other student not using the app will find it difficult
and will have to take additional efforts to bring himself to the same level. Hence these online mobile apps are highly conducive towards student's learning.
Secondly, the mobile phones help the parents to be less worried about the whereabouts of the students, and also allows the students to get notified about any cancellation of class or some tests that are rescheduled
and othe important notifications which will take time for a student to receive if he or she does not have an access to his or her private phones. If we look for an alternative where their parents own one
and they communicate the important news to their kids, that may reach to their ward when its futile as the kid has already taken an action. This delay due to numerous reasons
can affect the studies of a kid seriously. Moreover, foriding the use of mobile phones will make the student's desire to have it even stronger because as humans we long forbidden fruits even more.
However, I agree with the negative implications that it can have on an immature mind, for instance getting swayed away by the luring traps, dirty websites which can distract
students and others. Well,That is the reason I called it necessary evil. We all have heard about the "Blue Whale" game which became very popular in Asian countries. Kids of
all age groups who were lonely and depressed fell a prey to this suicidal game, which was brainwashing the students and with every level they were moving closer to their
deaths. So many immature minds commited suicide as the mobile phones acted as a tool for them with which they took their own lives.
Hence, to conclude, mobile phone is the need of an hour from adults to young folks, from businessmen to students to survive this fast moving world and the kids should not
be deprived of this exposure. Cell phone is a tool, which can help the kids to expand their horizons and see the world in different dimensions, provided that it is used
under the guidence of the parents and the kids are taught about its disadvantages and consequences at school as well as at home. Therefore it is a boon to the mankind if necessary c
checks are implemented.
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...class or some tests that are rescheduled and othe important notifications which w...
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...t to receive if he or she does not have an access to his or her private phones. If we lo...
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... if he or she does not have an access to his or her private phones. If we look fo...
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...sequences at school as well as at home. Therefore it is a boon to the mankind if necessar...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, however, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2851.0 1977.66487455 144% => OK
No of words: 601.0 407.700716846 147% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74376039933 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.95129289623 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47789108751 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 314.0 212.727598566 148% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522462562396 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 896.4 618.680645161 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.542804981 48.9658058833 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.956521739 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1304347826 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78260869565 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 21.0 4.53405017921 463% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182426556974 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.048749598622 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0410326318424 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0541711034703 0.150856017488 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0400373480351 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 86.8835125448 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.