Some parents forbid young children from owning smartphones (cell phones with Internet
access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in
touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
Internet is the way of life today. It could be possible that parents can possibly not relate with smartphones and internet not being a part of their life the same cannot be said for the children. They were born in the internet and smartphone age. Both smart devices and internet are a ubiquitous part of their life. According to me, children should be allowed to own cellphones after they attain a particular age, probably after .
In this radically networked society, we as individuals were never more connected. Be it knowledge, information or entertainment all is brought to us at our fingertips. With children having access to multiple sources of information, they can have more holistic learning going beyond what is taught in the classrooms. I personally feel that the school, especially the numerous projects, would have been interesting. I remember, it was so difficult to access sources like wikipedia in developing countries like one I grew up in.
Cheaper mobile phones and internet has made education and information accessible for people living the remote areas too. Students can take free courses from the best universities all free cost through their MOOCs. Apart from these, interent is a treasure trove of educational, informational videos and books!! Who will not want her/ his child reading as many as he/she could.
That being said, all boons would have its banes. The students can be exposed to ‘all’ forms of information. Misinformation, fake news, child pornography too are found on the internet freely which could be accessed by anyone. The exposure to these at an early and impressionable age may have deleterious effects. There have been cases where internet and phones have been used as a medium to radicalise young adults to dangers of society and religion.
Although there are potential dangers of exposure to internet at an early stage, I think the benefits outweigh. A constructive and at times, restricted use of technology is useful for the development of young children and should not be restricted by parents.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: to go
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, so, apart from, as to, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1731.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 335.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1671641791 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94662547442 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611940298507 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 539.1 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.9854973167 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.1052631579 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6315789474 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.05263157895 5.45110844103 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.10507525941 0.236089414692 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0297022762418 0.076458572812 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.032853727469 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0577212752017 0.150856017488 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0264359041755 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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