Some parents forbid young children from owning smartphones (cell phones with Internet
access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in
touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
According to my view, it is not always good to forbid children from using smartphones. I too believe that smartphones are iimportant for keeping in touch as the statement poses. Now a days, Smartphones are the ones that keep people connected who are far away even from reach or time. Children having smartphone will be more sohisticated than other children from my point of view.
For instance, the touch mentioned in the statement is very important and smartphones are the best way to have that. There are other ways to connect but this is the easy and fast way obviously. Perhaps, Keeping family informed is very important as children today too travel alone. With the robbery and kidnapping cases still present in this modern world, it would be very helpful for children to seek help using smartphones by sharing their locations via internet's help. Also, as children travel alone as both the parent's leave for work mostly, it great to share locations with parents during travel or with the help of GPS and internet anyone can track them whenever necessary. In case of emergency, this would seem much persuading. Even most of the grown-ups don't know routes clearly, online map help children reach their destination correctly. Smartphones would be much helpful for children in hostels, as homesick the worst experienxce, atleast it was for me. Back then, without smartphone widespread need, I felt really far away from home and parents. But now a days, it is not the case. Children can be in tuch with their family, whenever necessary through video calls which akes us feel more homely.
Some parents who are opposing children from using smartphones sounds quite naive. There are children who don't use it properly for studies or help only. But, that is not the case always, Children's will get refined ideas and will become more informed about studies and hapening around them. Using smatphones will keep them updated if used right. Today, video lectures, onlinecourses and many other helpful things for children will engage them in right path to gain knowledge. Internet provides wide access to various resources about past and present developments. These factors and useful matters should be considered by parents who oppose children using smartphones.
In my opinion, Completely banishing children from smartphone is not right decision. Rather, parents should teach them what to do and how to use them appropriately. We say, Knowledge is power. And, today's power is gained mostly via smartphones help. Considering keeping in touch to all extent of help from smartphones, I think and believe that children must posses smartphones.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 179, Rule ID: NOW_A_DAYS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: Nowadays
...eeping in touch as the statement poses. Now a days, Smartphones are the ones that keep peo...
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Line 1, column 183, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a day' or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: a day; days
...ng in touch as the statement poses. Now a days, Smartphones are the ones that keep peo...
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Line 3, column 406, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to use' or 'use'.
Suggestion: to use; use
... very helpful for children to seek help using smartphones by sharing their locations ...
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Line 3, column 761, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... persuading. Even most of the grown-ups dont know routes clearly, online map help ch...
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Line 3, column 951, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mesick the worst experienxce, atleast it was for me. Back then, without smartphon...
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Line 3, column 1062, Rule ID: NOW_A_DAYS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: nowadays
...lly far away from home and parents. But now a days, it is not the case. Children can be in...
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Line 3, column 1066, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a day' or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: a day; days
...far away from home and parents. But now a days, it is not the case. Children can be in...
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Line 5, column 106, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...nds quite naive. There are children who dont use it properly for studies or help onl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, really, so, still, then, as for, for instance, i think, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2209.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 432.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11342592593 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62018121127 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537037037037 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 653.4 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.3693425182 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.8148148148 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.11111111111 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24819680463 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0713951896818 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0521600861156 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170939145977 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0520279858027 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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