Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school.
Do you think this is a good idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this era of technology and the internet, inviting young children to focus on their school assignments and tasks has become really hard. Nowadays, parents have to use different strategies in order to help their children achieve a high level of studies. In this way, I believe that if parents praise their children by giving them money for each great mark, they can not only get their children to stick to their studies but also help them in other aspects of their lives. In the following essay, I will explore some reasons to support this idea.
First of all, the only thing that kids have to learn is not school subjects, since, and mathematics. Definitely, to help the young youth become successful in the future, parents are obliged to teach them a variety of things. For instance, a young person has to learn about different social situations, being polite, well-behaving, and additionally, the value of money and the hard job that is needed to get a specific amount of money. So, if parents reward their toddlers by giving them money after getting a great mark at school, children will learn that they have to dedicate a great deal of time and energy to get whatever they need in their future life.
As for the second reason, paying children helps them learn more about saving and investing. Actually, children need so many things like toys, dolls, and etcetera. But getting them the thing they want immediately after they asked for is not a good idea. If they get what they want by a process of hard-working, they will appreciate what they have more properly. For instance, when I was 10 years old, I loved to have a special doll. However, my parents told me that if I study well, I can get 10 dollars for each great grade and can save my money to buy whatever I like. After some exams, I could afford the price of the doll I wanted and when I bought that, it made me feel like I am a person who has the ability to manage money, achieve my goals, and also proud of myself. So, not only I got amazing marks, but also I taught how to save money and manage my investments.
Finally, yet importantly, we are living in an era of technology and the intense progress of the internet and communication. In this respect, students can hardly focus on school subjects because they prefer to play video games, chat with their friends, and surf the internet. Hence, it is essential to encourage people to focus on their education and help them become seasoned and trained in some special skills. So, by offering money, parents can draw more attention to school assignments and play an important role in finishing the studies properly.
To sum it up, I believe that paying children for the great marks they get from the school exams helps them to learn the worth of money, know how to save and invest, and pay more attention to their school subjects.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, really, second, so, well, as for, as to, for instance, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2340.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 509.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59724950884 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42930148535 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463654223969 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 706.5 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.4148067815 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.428571429 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2380952381 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.90476190476 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.363310862617 0.236089414692 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105302200473 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0704100368928 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219012008634 0.150856017488 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0700636876334 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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