Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school.
Do you think this is a good idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Education now is one of the most important criteria to succeed in life. There are ample of ways by which students meet their goals and the parents help their children in progressing in their career. Everything in life is like a coin having different sides. People should weigh the pros and cons before jumping to a conclusion. Although, some people may disagree to the statement but in my opinion such views lack coherence to some extent. In my humble opinion, I would agree that parents should offer their school-age children money for good grades for student motivation.
First and foremost, Many people would agree to the notion that students need something by which they get motivated and are more interested in performing well in their academics. I believe students are more likely to put more efforts in their work when they know they would we rewarded for it. It is a normal human tendency that people most often tend to put most effort to get appreciated by others. For instance, I would like to give an example of my younger brother. He is in ninth grade.Earlier my brother did not like to study and was more towards sports. According to him it was not necessary to study and score high grades as he thought it would not benefit him. When we asked him he said that he is happy with what he scores as he thought that grades do not matter in the future. But, when we told him that we will reward him if he gets good marks, my brother started putting more efforts to score well. Gradually, as he studied more and scored well, we not only appreciated him but also gifted him.Therefore, my brother liked to study and put more potential towards his studies. All in all, we cannot and should not overlook the fact that students often get motivated by small things we do to make them happy.
Secondly, in my view I think that offering money to school children would not only help them in their academics but also in other activities. If we offer students money, they will do well, due to which they would be respected in the class and among his friends. Not only they will gain respect and honor from everybody, but they could use this money for themselves. Some students like to save their money to buy something they wish for. For example, when I was in tenth grade, I wanted to buy a laptop for myself. My parents wanted me to score well in my exams but, I took it very casually. As they told me that I could use this money to buy a laptop for myself, I decided to work more and study hard and I could save it for buying a laptop. As every time I scored well, My parents gave me some money and hence, I bought a laptop which made me so happy and I felt on the top of the world. I was honored by everybody in the class and was awarded with student appreciation certificate. Long story short, It is clear to me as a day that students would gain respect and save their money for buying stuff for themselves.
In summation, Yes it is virtually impossible to propose a completely satisfying answer to an open-ended question but, we may come to a mutual understanding that parents should offer their school-aged children so that they not only get motivated by this but also could use their money for themselves.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, i think, in my opinion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 9.8082437276 234% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 106.0 43.0788530466 246% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2626.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 587.0 407.700716846 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.47359454855 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9222030514 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44599680642 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.427597955707 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 810.9 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5290972896 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.2592592593 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7407407407 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.18518518519 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27454908078 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0810238961563 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0804474564028 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202408397528 0.150856017488 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.071834110878 0.0645574589148 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.65 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.13 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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