Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed (damaged) by human activity. Others feel that human activity makes the Earth a better place to live. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Our home planet, the Earth, is crucial part of our lives. It where we born, we grow up and we probably will die too. Some people would believe that human activity is making the Earth a better place to live; others would disagree. In my view, the Earth is being severely harmed by human activity for two important reasons.
The main reason is that the atmosphere temperature is increasing year after year. The global warming is not a new concept for scientists. The constant increase of harmful gases, such as carbon dioxide and monoxide is very dangerous for the environment. These gases are creating the called “greenhouse effect”, where the Earth’s temperature is becoming higher in an uncontrolled way. For example, I remember seeing on television last week, a documentary about the climate change on our planet. They showed a graph indicating the mean temperature in the last century. From 1000 to about 1800 the increase was about half degrees celsius per decade but, after the industrial revolution, the temperature variation started raising to an actual level of four degrees per decade. The researchers stated that the Earth did not saw a big increase since the primordial ages before life. Also, they claimed that if nations remain with the actual levels of pollution, all the life could be extinct in the next one thousand years. As you can see, scientific data are showing that the Earth is really being harmed by us.
Another reason is the increasing of devastated forests levels. Many people who live in the Amazon forest area are starting to feel the changes due to the reduction of green areas. The worldwide vegetation is very important for the Earth’s equilibre and it is very sensible for any changes. For instance, I’m living in Brazil and I have a friend called Fabio from Manaus. This city was constructed almost in the middle of the jungle. Fabio told me about his childhood when he always played with his friends in the Amazon forest. He explained that they need to walk about five minutes from his home to reach the trees. Conversely, nowadays it is impossible to go to any green are within a two hours walking. He stated that wood companies totally devastated any green area close to Manaus in the last five years, the lack of surveillance and police force helped these people to advance inside the forest with tractors and chainsaw without any problem. He also told me that when he was a child, it was very easy to see very beautiful and exotic birds, like tucanos and araras, but now they completely disappeared. This experience taught me that the human activity also could be felt by normal people.
In sum, though some may opposes the statement, the damage on the Earth is real. Not only the temperature is increasing very rapidly but also our forests are being destructed. Everyone should try to introduce in their lives some activities to curb the harm that we are causing to the Earth.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 71, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[1]
Message: Possible grammatical error. You used a past participle without using any required verb ('be' or 'have'). Did you mean 'bore'?
Suggestion: bore
... crucial part of our lives. It where we born, we grow up and we probably will die to...
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Line 2, column 138, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ng is not a new concept for scientists. The constant increase of harmful gases, suc...
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Line 2, column 374, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an uncontrolled way" with adverb for "uncontrolled"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...h's temperature is becoming higher in an uncontrolled way. For example, I remember seeing on tele...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, if, may, really, so, for example, for instance, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 15.1003584229 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2443.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 503.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85685884692 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73578520332 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6052037589 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 278.0 212.727598566 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55268389662 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 767.7 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 11.0 3.08781362007 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.3210518368 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.25 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9642857143 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.21428571429 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208871963138 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0571086108254 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0862424122984 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161190431385 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0997739790147 0.0645574589148 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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