Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, people are busy in their work and daily life. So, it is rare them to have time spending with their children. It goes with out saying that parents have to use that alittle time with their sons and daughters. While some people say that parents should spend that time doing somethings such as homework together, I believ it can be devoted to have fun, playing games, and so forth. In what follows, I will give some reasons and substantiate them.
First of all and foremost, parents must spend time with their children to playing game os sports because they are best friends of them to play. Young people play every day, and most of their time are spended with games. Most of these games should be played with more than one person. So, they have to find partner to play. Who is the better person than parents? It is crystal clear that no one is better than father and mother. For example, when a child plays soccer in their yard, if he play with his friend who is their neighbor's son, it will dangerous for him to have injury during the play. But, if he palys with his parents, they will try so protect him from an injury. Therefore, children can spend their time with their parents to play or fun.
Secondly, parents can improve their relation related to their feelings and emotions with their children by playing with them. For instance, a son thinks his father is most brave person in the world. When he plays with his father, it raise this feeling in their mind. Thus, in future, he can do his duty in the hard situation because he thinks his father can help him to do this, and this affected to his thinks. Likewise, parents can spend their free moments with their sons and daughters to promote their emotional relations with chldren.
To conclude, not only can playing with children protect the children from injury, but it can also raise parents relation related to their emotions with children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 128, Rule ID: WITH_OUT[1]
Message: This word is usually written together. Did you mean 'without'?
Suggestion: without
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Line 3, column 489, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'plays'.
Suggestion: plays
...child plays soccer in their yard, if he play with his friend who is their neighbors ...
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Line 5, column 234, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'raises'?
Suggestion: raises
...orld. When he plays with his father, it raise this feeling in their mind. Thus, in fu...
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Line 5, column 274, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...raise this feeling in their mind. Thus, in future, he can do his duty in the hard situati...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, likewise, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1576.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 342.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6081871345 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.1010109754 2.67179642975 79% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491228070175 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 448.2 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.4771703389 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.8 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.3 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.404365455128 0.236089414692 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.142107537382 0.076458572812 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107001150088 0.0737576698707 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264407586763 0.150856017488 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113549465307 0.0645574589148 176% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.6 58.1214874552 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.16 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.83 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 86.8835125448 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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