Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Modern society has become very complicated, obliging people to spend more time working outside, comparing to the past, a fact which has made parents have less free time to spend with their children. As the childhood has the utmost importance in shaping people's personality, here comes the long-debated question whether it is better to spend the meager leisure time playing games or sports with children, or to do things that are related to schoolwork, both of which seem reasonable in some aspects. Personally, I believe parents should organize the time so that they can do both, the notion which I'm going to elaborate further here.
Children crave playing games and sports, and while the schools are mostly focused on teaching theoretical lessons, parents can do a complementary job providing the chance for the children to play. While playing, they can gain a lot of energy that can help them be more ambitious and successful in school. It also develops their mental and physical abilities. For example, by playing team sports with their parents, they learn a lot about teamwork, which helps them to be more successful in their future occupations.
Alongside what we discussed above, children also need education, and parents can be a big help for children in schoolwork. Children may have some problems with the schoolwork that they cannot solve alone. While they may feel embarrassed to ask their teacher or their classmates, their intimate relationship with the parents can be a great merit. On the other hand, there are usually a lot of students in a classroom, a fact which makes it difficult for the teachers to keep an eye on each of the students. It also makes it hard for some students to keep pace with the class, and parents can use their time to fill this gap. Spending time to do assignments together can also improve children's enthusiasm and confidence; it just feels better than studying alone.
Many busy parents prefer to play and have fun with their children, mainly because it is both easier and more cool to do so. However, the parents should try to maintain a balance between having fun and help with children's schoolwork. This way, not only will the children enjoy the time with their parents, but also they can learn a lot.
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Suggestion: I'm
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, thus, while, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1881.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 383.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91122715405 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57774161271 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522193211488 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.8895197192 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.5625 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9375 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.75 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.396796819464 0.236089414692 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133957903221 0.076458572812 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0734754655453 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.256394423081 0.150856017488 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0837323168275 0.0645574589148 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 10.247311828 185% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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