Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is blatantly obvious that the idea of spending funny times with children to lead a perfect life has gained widespread currency in all societies. While some people believe that parents should pay attention to their children's schoolwork during their free time, others take an opposing viewpoint and think that not only children need leisure times in their life but also, parents are key persons in children's life who should care about their health. I support the opinion that parents must spend their little time to create a fun time for their offspring. In what follows, I will elaborate on my standpoint.
It is an indisputable fact that in this complex society, there are a lot of difficult situations which it is needed to have a fresh mind to deal with them. To clarify this concept, having a healthy mental, persons are able to handle their works much better and reach a higher level of efficiency in their affairs. Additionally, children's mentality takes shape in from the early stage of their life, and parents could have a great effect on which by creating a comfortable atmosphere for them. As a result, spending the time with fun activities, parents not only enable the children to have a creative and much healthier mind but also, offspring would be much successful in their future life due to their great experiences with their parents during their childhood. Take a personal Experience as an example, I remember that when I was 10 years old, my mother was a teacher and most of the time was at school. Additionally, my father was an employee and he had to work many hours to deal with financial problems. Consequently, I not only was alone most of the time but also, this solitude affected my mentality, and I dreamed some strange creatures attacking me. After this problem, my parents decided to spend much more time with me in order to solve this difficulty. As time passed, the situation was changed and my mind became much fresh because I went to parks and did sports with my father in my free time. Indeed, had not they spent adequate time with me, I would have not been able to reach a higher level of mental health.
Furthermore, another equally remarkable point substantiating my outlook is that in today's life, due to many difficult circumstances, it is necessary to both parents and children to have a close relationship with each other. No one can cast a shadow of suspicion on this notion that children need the help of their parents in their lives, because of parents' worthwhile experiences in different aspects of life. Moreover, spending leisure times with offspring, parents could create a close relationship with them and this results in some great effects such as allows children to become closer to their parents and as a result, they can take shape an emotional relationship. Consequently, due to much works parents have in their life, they spend little time with children and this confined time should be spent on funny activities that have thorny impresses on their relationships.
Taking all the aforementioned into account, one can logically conclude that parents should spend their time to create leisure times for their children. This is because not only it affects offspring's mentality, but also, this action enables both children and parents to create a close connection with each other.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1372, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'sport'
Suggestion: sport
...h fresh because I went to parks and did sports with my father in my free time. Indeed,...
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Line 9, column 691, Rule ID: TO_TOO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
...otional relationship. Consequently, due to much works parents have in their life, ...
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Line 9, column 694, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...onal relationship. Consequently, due to much works parents have in their life, they ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, if, look, moreover, so, while, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2784.0 1977.66487455 141% => OK
No of words: 565.0 407.700716846 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92743362832 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87542086881 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67641169769 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.444247787611 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 842.4 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.4014900478 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.2 100.406767564 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.25 20.6045352989 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.45 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327276903076 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12159873563 0.076458572812 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731203739809 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.240934834572 0.150856017488 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0411979502145 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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