Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Childhood is the most important period in any person`s life and parents should consider it when they raise their children. Personally, I think that it is better for a child and his parents to spend time together playing and having fun when parents lack much of free time. There are a few reasons why I hold this opinion.
First of all, when children and parents have fun together, they make memories. Making memories with parents is crucial for any child because time goes so fast, so, when children become adults and their parents pass away, the only wonderful things they have left from their parents are great warm memories of moments spent together. If parents spend time with their little ones just by helping them with their schoolwork, children are not going to recall these moments in the future because quite often a learning process is boring. Although it is important for parents to contribute to their children education, having really enjoyable time together is crucial. Moreover, parents always can hire a tutor to help the child with his school assignments. This is one of the reasons why parents should be concentrated on having truly pleasant time with their children.
Secondly, when children and parents play together, they build a bridge to the connection. During sports games, children and parents learn each other, which helps them to understand each other better. If parents and their children are on the same page, they can build a strong friendship, and when children grow up, they are still friends with parents. In this way, they gather and participate in each other's life not because they have to but because they want. My own experience is a compelling example of this. During my childhood, I regularly played volleyball with family. This sports activity made us closer to each other, and even now, when I have my own children, I love to hang out with my family members since they are my soul mates. That is why it is pivotal for parents to play with their young.
To conclude, I strongly believe that parents should play with their children rather than helping them with school assignments when they are incredibly busy. This is because it creates precious memories and strengthens families members` relationships.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 402, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'others'' or 'other's'?
Suggestion: others'; other's
...ay, they gather and participate in each others life not because they have to but becau...
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Line 4, column 256, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s families members' relationships.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, still, then, i think, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1884.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 378.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98412698413 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50888513749 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502645502646 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.2418090205 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1578947368 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8947368421 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.73684210526 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30995004292 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112811785734 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0815818004668 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210783635264 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.068844369094 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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