Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social-networking sites. Other people prefer not to create such records.Which approach do you prefer, and why?
People from all ages today almost have one or more accounts in those social-networking sites. Many informations, like latest news, anecdotes of the famous, can be retrieved from those sites and we can also share our own experiences by posting a post consists of pictures and other information. Personally, I am in favor of such kind of sharings and I like to keep a record of my experience by this way. I will explain the reasons why I prefer to do that in the subsequent paragraphs.
What should be priorized is that sharing your experience on social medias helps you make new friends as well as keep old friends. To begin with, people who have experienced same things are likely to comment below and then you even can have a talk with them wherever you are. There is a vivid example of mine. I love cycling and I bought an indoor cycle stage to exercise without going outside in the period of pandemic. I often shared my training records on the community of Zwift in Reddit. One day, a message popped in Reddit and a people asked me about the use of Zwift in China because he was going to move to China and he was not sure whether the Great Wall will affect the user' experience. I was so happy to see this message because it was a chance that I could help others in my interested fields. I replied his answers in detail and we even have chatted later beyond this questions, which was an interesting experience. Moreover, sharing experience also helps to keep old friends. For instance, when I entered the university, those old friends with whom I have had wonderful times were also going different city to achieve their own dream. The only way can we communicate with each other is chatting on the internet about what we are doing now. If you don't post anything about yourself, no one will know what you are doing and the distance between you and your friends will be enlarged bit by bit. Therefore, it is important to share your experience on the social-networking sites.
What need be mentioned equally is that sharing your experiences on the internet also benefits yourself. Firstly, it can serve as a record of your life. It is known that the memory of the internet is indefinate. The internet won't forget anything as long as you have told it. Thus, it is a good way to record your life on it. Secondly, posting your experiences on social-networking sites may encourage you at some time. I used to post my study progress about a course called 100 Days of Swfit on Reddit and it pushed me to keep studying in case of being regarded as a person without consistence. In a consequence, sharing your experiences on the social media is beneficial for your personal development.
To sum up, I belive that sharing what you are doing on the social-networking sites benefits both for your friendship and your personal development, so I prefer to do that.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, well, for instance, kind of, as well as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 75.0 43.0788530466 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2352.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 510.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61176470588 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75217629947 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77802105817 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 747.0 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.0545084816 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.4615384615 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6153846154 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.80769230769 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269673928172 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0692605371629 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0499889407522 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181290705921 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0615046156754 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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