Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social-networking sites. Other people prefer not to create such records. Which approach do you prefer, and why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Accessing the Internet and using social media applications are the most important pillars of each society in today's world. Due to the fact, we live in a fast-speed world, every decision that we make has some consequences. Although, using social media makes our lives more easier and agreeable, there are some criticisms of it. A controversial question that is often raised regarded to this issue is whether people should upload their personal pictures and other information to social networking, or they should keep them private. Some people possess that conviction that the former is more amiable whereas others hold exactly that the latter has a more chance of safety. I am personally content that this issue is multifaceted. I think new technology sometimes makes our lives hard. So I prefer to secondly approach. To substantiate my point of view, the following paragraphs represent a cursory glance at the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason coming to mind elucidating outpointing is that hackers and virtual thiefa are more rather than past. They spend more time on social media to get normal people in trouble and trapped. Thus, for our safety and security, it is important that we don't act unconscious and emotionally . Uploading family gathering or personal information on public sites or even on private pages have negative consequences. These photos and information are stored in the application's databases and if some hackers attack them, they can steal them.
The second rationale behind this opinion is rooted in the fact that sharing personal photos are boring for other people who are in our network. Some people have a lot of problems and when they see these kinds of a picture they think that there are no problems in other people's lives and this thought makes them more upset and dreary. Consider my personal experience to make this point more clear. I used Instagram a lot. I was addicted to it. I followed celebrities and famous artists. I have always seen that they posted their high-luxury lives to others and their family gathering which contained several huge foods and desserts. After that, I compared my personal life with theirs and felt depressed. I know now, this phenomenon call slice of life and it is not all true of their lives.
In brief, due to the aforementioned reasons, I prefer to keep my images on my album or hang them on the wall, instead of sharing them on social medial applications.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 268, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...ugh, using social media makes our lives more easier and agreeable, there are some criticism...
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Line 2, column 259, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...y and security, it is important that we dont act unconscious and emotionally . Uploa...
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Line 2, column 295, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... we dont act unconscious and emotionally . Uploading family gathering or personal ...
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Line 3, column 443, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... Instagram a lot. I was addicted to it. I followed celebrities and famous artists...
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Line 3, column 486, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ollowed celebrities and famous artists. I have always seen that they posted their...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, secondly, so, thus, whereas, i think, in brief
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2030.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97549019608 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70014115378 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544117647059 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.6713575079 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.5833333333 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.70833333333 5.45110844103 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227408956375 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0556121395576 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0516414618923 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128432556149 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0470526701906 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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