some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to so much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The advent of the internet has had the most significant influence on humans' lives among all the fascinating inventions throughout history. Many people believe that the information provided by the internet is essential in today's civilizations, while others think that it is more harmful than beneficial in many cases. In my perspective, the internet has had many positive effects on people for the following reasons.
First of all, the internet's contributions to the promotion of science in various fields of study are undeniable. Today, thanks to the internet, elites can share their achievements with scientists all around the world and take advantage of other's findings conveniently and efficiently. For example, a psychology student can search through all the papers and researches related to his specific field of study. Therefore, by comparing the results of his own work with the facts gathered from these researches, his work would be much more valuable and worthwhile than a case in which his resources were restricted to few books and papers in the university's library.
Second, the ocean of online information accessible by everyone has made education significantly more independent. To be more specific, people don't necessarily need to bear the expenses of mentors and instructors to learn about a new field they which is attractive for them. Nowadays, one could learn how to play a new musical instrument, a new language, usage of a new computer software, an innovative cook recipe, and so on comfortably by the abundant educational videos on the internet. For example, one of my professors required me to learn Java programming language for my bachelor's project. If I hadn't had the option of free online courses related to Java programming, I would have needed to register for an extra class or hire a personal tutor since learning a programming language by reading books is almost an impossible task to do.
In conclusion, the information that the internet has brought about for people, not only has been beneficial for the advance of science but also has provided people a chance to educate themselves in various fields in which they might be interested.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, first of all, in many cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1839.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 355.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18028169014 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00424086946 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571830985915 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 576.9 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.9038966725 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.461538462 100.406767564 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3076923077 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.23076923077 5.45110844103 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166889736379 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.057128766032 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0419492862015 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102483435284 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0294997884772 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 11.7677419355 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.47 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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