Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Earth have limited resources and lands but as humans we act like it was illimited. This kind of behaviour create a problem whether we prefer to save some lands to continue increasing human development or we can save these lands to endangered animals. I believe that we should saved lands to endangered animals because we can’t continue to destroy the nature and we have to think about the future.
First, I believe that we have to stop destroying forest like Amazonia’s forest where a lot of endangered animals’ species live, just to fill up the industry. An industry, which most of the time, is functioning on an overconsommation concept, what means that we don’t really need the product created. For instance, many monkeys are killed right now because of palm oil exploitation in Amazonia. Palm oil are in the recipes of most of industrial sugary food in the supermarket. In fact, we could replace this oil by another one or just suppress it, instead of taking lands and killing animals’ habitat.
Second, we have to think about the future that will come if we don’t do anything to endangered species. The nature will be disbalanced with the early missing of certain animals’ species. For example, the food chain will be in chaos if some of the bottom animals happened to disappear. The other animals, higher in the chain, will no longer have food and will starve to death. It can become a domino effect and affect more species than we think at the beginning.
In conclusion, saving lands to endangered animals can re-equilibrate nature’s destruction by humans and reduce future impacts that can impact us at long-term.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, really, second, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1393.0 1977.66487455 70% => OK
No of words: 277.0 407.700716846 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02888086643 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93673823153 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56678700361 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 439.2 618.680645161 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.1850870121 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.5 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7857142857 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.71428571429 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144493394629 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0558199354621 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0374474121759 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0905043152254 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0303989985152 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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