some young adult want independence from their parents as soon as possible. other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. which of this situations do you think is better?
Nowadays most adults want to live separately, rather than to live with their parents. They can enjoy the full independence and can act according their willingness. This might be the key factor, which drives the young people to live far from their family members. I personally believe children should live separately from their family as soon as they become adults so that they can take care of themselves. I asserts this because of two main reasons, which I will elaborately explain in the following essay.
First of all, children should live alone after being enough matured to differentiate between bad and good. This will help them to grow sense of responsibility as well as assists them to be matured. Because, being stay from their parents, it is required to do all activities by themselves. This equips the young guys to be responsible and it also facilitates them to understand which one s/he should select in performing certain tasks. My own experience is the compelling examples of this. At the beginning of my under graduation, I had to leave my home and live far from my parents to pursue my degree. It definitely helped me to be self independent. Now I can think by myself and can segregate between the beneficial activities and detrimental activities for myself and it made me responsible to myself as well as to my family members.
Secondly, living far from parents give the opportunity to get acquainted with various kind of people. This definitely will help them to think differently and to see the world in his own eyes. To live independently, will help him to understand the philosophy of life. For instance, living far from my parents changed the way of my thinking.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that young children should give the opportunity to live far from their parents. This is so because it will help them to grow self responsibility inside as well as it will change the perception of life.
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...myself as well as to my family members. Secondly, living far from parents give t...
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... it will change the perception of life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, secondly, so, well, as to, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1599.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 329.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86018237082 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84937831331 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480243161094 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 496.8 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.0179139609 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.1578947368 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3157894737 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282207615361 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0890842960666 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0722200959645 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181732803753 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0899727364306 0.0645574589148 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.12 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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