Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better ? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Adulthood is the essential period of mankind that we face the dilemma between making decision with the help of our parents and making it with our own maturity. Even though, many people think that living with their parents for long time is better option, I definitely prefer my own independence as soon as turn into adult. I feel this way for several reasons including by staying with family we would be vulnerable in this competitive society and seperating myself from my family after adulthood, I will be able to gain knowledge by my own without constraint.
First and foremost, people who spend their lives with the parents tend to be more vulnerable than the people live seperately from their family. The most important phase that we have to consider is finance. When young adults live their with their parents, they becomes ones who do not understand their responsibility to work for their family and for themselves because most parents provide everything including occupation, food, and finance. One of my acquaintaces is compelling example of what I mean. He is the lazy person who does not even realize his interest and spends almost 25 years with his family. His parents were responsible for his every educational phase by paying his school fee. As a consequences, he is unemployed after his university graduation due to lack of decision making and responsibility for himself.
Secondly, isolation teaches person to dealt with many dire problems and is the crucial opportunity to improve and become aware of themselves without any restriction. Although, it is hard to live seperately from our family, alone and likely to fail in further, we will be able to make decisions with maturity. Most successful entreperneur who are leading the world with their own business, for example, Ellon Musk founder of Tesla motors was once lived his life all alone. He has failed many times that endeavoured to establish many start-up companies, but he failed consecutively because of scarcity of experience and knowledge. However, he has been trying hard to achieve his goals that devising cheapest and effiecient car in the world. Assuming that if he had lived his life with his parents, he would not be one who is leading the world because most parents restrict by their view in order to avoiding from risk.
In conclusion, living seperately is the better option than the being dependent of their parents. Due to, if we keep living with our family we would become purposless, lazy, and who do not understand the responsibility. Also, isolation is one of the best way to experience joy and sufferings which are important aspect of human beings life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 260, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'become'
Suggestion: become
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Line 2, column 697, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a consequence' or simply 'consequences'?
Suggestion: a consequence; consequences
...onal phase by paying his school fee. As a consequences, he is unemployed after his university ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mple, Ellon Musk founder of Tesla motors was once lived his life all alone. He ha...
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Line 4, column 328, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'beings'' or 'being's'?
Suggestion: beings'; being's
...ngs which are important aspect of human beings life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, for example, i feel, i mean, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2207.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 442.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99321266968 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75415204627 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513574660633 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 698.4 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.1196390883 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.157894737 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2631578947 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254554222101 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0789047990984 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0870091663306 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162405793429 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0547985336349 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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