Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better?

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Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better?

Parents are like pillars for everyone at their young age. In my opinion, it is better for youngs to live with their parents until they are mature enough. I feel this way, which I will explore in the following essay.

First of all, youngs by their age and nature are at the learning phase. At this critical age, youngs need proper guidance, and family members can be the most reliable caretaker. With the help of proper suggestion, youngs can get into their trail which ultimately leads to the summit of achievement. Experience gained by my uncle illustrates this point vividly. When he was at his high school days, he was involved in dancing class given by the college because he always wanted to gain recognition in the field of dance. Despite his relentless effort, he could not do the dancing steps clearly and attractively. He thought to quit the class. But, at that moment his mother helped him to gain confidence. She managed all the required materials for the dancing and urged him to practice at home too. Furthermore, she herself practice with him so that he fell motivated. Finally, he mastered all the moves and now his dance moves are immaculate. If there was no family support at the right moment, my uncle would not have been able to achieve his dream.

Secondly, family members always protect their children from getting involved in bad friend circle and stimulate them not to make such friends. In the absence of proper care of the parents, youngs can involve in bad deeds. The habit developed by one of my friend is a clear example of his point. His father and mother were in abroad. They used to come to visit him once in the year. He was free at his home and used to do anything he want. With the passage of the time, he made friends who were drug addicts. Due to these friends, he started to use drugs. Furthermore, he got caught red-handed when he was dealing with drug customers. If he was under his parent’s proper care, he would not have involved in such activities.
However, it is also true that beings with parents for a long time can make young one utterly dependent on their parents. If the youngs are getting what they want, then it is possible that they may not be serious about their future and may not think about making money independently. So it is necessary for youngs to understand themselves rather than being dependent without proper consideration of the future.

In conclusion, i am of the opinion that young should spend their time longer with their parents because parents provide the proper guidance at the immature age of the young and they help to be away from bad friends circle. However, parents, may not always can do better for their children on themselves. For his the sense of maturity and self-understanding is needed for the youngs.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 434, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
... at his home and used to do anything he want. With the passage of the time, he made ...
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Line 8, column 16, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ration of the future. In conclusion, i am of the opinion that young should spe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, i feel, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2311.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 492.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69715447154 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51566823225 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 705.6 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.4828556613 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.5483870968 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8709677419 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38709677419 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256367674885 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0711598295857 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0786763606717 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197105201487 0.150856017488 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0891518068699 0.0645574589148 138% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.68 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.11 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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