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Teachers should be retrained to get new knowledge.

Some people argue that teachers should not be mandated to be retrained. However, I firmly believe that teachers should be retrained and updated their knowledge for the reasons addressed below. First, being retrained can prevent teachers from teaching wrong information. Moreoever, retraining process can lead improvement of their lecutre's quality.

To begin with, getting new knowledge by being retrained can keep teacher from teaching incorrect information. As one of the main goals of teachers is to teach correctly, it is important for teachers to be equipped with correct knowledge. However, teacher may have incorrect knowledge as it can be revealed that some information which was believed to be true was actually wrong for diverse reasons such as change in policy or new reasearch result. Compared to the teachers who are not been retrained, teachers who are continuosly updating their knowledge are less likely to have outdated information and therefore they are likely to teach correctly. To illustrate, there were two Korean teachers in my high school: Song and Kim. Whereas Song continously updated his knoweledge by retraining, Kim was lazy and refused to be retrainined. One day there was change in Korea grammar policy and Song can correctly teach with changed knowledge as he recognized the change. On the other hand, Kim did not know that there was a change and she taught her students an outdated information. There was a question about the change in the test and most of the students leaded by Song got wrong whereas most of students in Kim's class got it right. As a result, Kim was awarded by the school but Song was punished severely.

Furthermore, retraining process can help teachers improve their lecture's quality. Being retrained can provide teachers an opportunity of having a valuable lesson by experiencing of being learner. Such experience allow teachers to understand student's perpective well and realize what makes students hard how can make student understand easier. For example, I taught computer science to high school students for part time job and I did not know whay students have difficulty in understanding comuter language's semantics and how to make them understand easier. However, one day I participated to the seminar and learned a new computer language. By learning a new computer language I acknowledged that the best way to understand computer language's semantic is to implement a program by using the language. Therefore, I strated to teach students by leading them to implement a program using the language and this was a effective way to make student understand the language's semantics a lot easier.

To sum up, retrained instructors are less likely to teach wrong information and retraining process can help instructors develop their teaching method. Therefore, I believe that teachers should be retrained continously.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 510, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...rs who are not been retrained, teachers who are continuosly updating their knowledge ar...
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Line 3, column 1187, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the students') or simply say ''most students''.
Suggestion: most of the students; most students
...udents leaded by Song got wrong whereas most of students in Kims class got it right. As a result...
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Line 5, column 411, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...ter science to high school students for part time job and I did not know whay students ha...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 913, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...program using the language and this was a effective way to make student understan...
^
Line 5, column 960, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'languages'' or 'language's'?
Suggestion: languages'; language's
...tive way to make student understand the languages semantics a lot easier. To sum up, r...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, whereas, for example, such as, as a result, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 15.1003584229 205% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2420.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 458.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28384279476 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88785979186 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.451965065502 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 733.5 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.7723470064 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.217391304 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9130434783 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.378035613922 0.236089414692 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134569770031 0.076458572812 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.134439592484 0.0737576698707 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.26563267899 0.150856017488 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107199260407 0.0645574589148 166% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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