TPO-10 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Playing computer games in modern days is famous and there is a child, we can find rarely, who doesn't play computer games. Computer games is a pass time activity among children and nowadays the industry of computer gaming is growing. But the peoples should learn the side effect and bad side of computer gaming. I personally think a child should not play the computer game and I am going to give some reason to bolster my thought.
First of all, buying a computer game cost a lot of money and gaming consoles need more money to invest. Once you complete the game it was a total waste and you don't need that game anymore, so buying a game is a total waste of money. Instead of wasting money on some game you can spend your money on something that you can use for a long term. Playing a game needs a lot of time and peoples waste their time on playing it rather than on their daily work, what they really need to do.
Secondly, computer games are addictive and peoples waste their energy and time behind it. Sometimes they are continuously playing without taking a break, in a static position and that harm their backbone and neck. And continuously playing a computer game, they blue rays emitted from computer harm their eyes. There was a case, a child, who had been playing a computer game for three days, die because of without food and drink and any proper movement. The children who are still going to school or have a growing mind, computer game cause harm to their mind. Also playing too much computer game can harm their study as they thinking about the game relentlessly. This kind of activity damage the balance between mental and physical, as Childs doesn’t take part in physical activity.
Some contents of the video games are not suitable for children. Some computer game has age restrictions and some contents exploit contents and seeing those can actually harm a young mind. Some peoples argue that playing computer games actually helps to increase critical thinking and the industry provides so many jobs and some games like Soccer are good. But I would say that even though they are good but the calumny of playing computer games still hurt children and any of the bad effects are not justified because of some peoples say it has a good effect.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 78, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'rarely' is usually put before the verb 'find'.
Suggestion: rarely find
... is famous and there is a child, we can find rarely, who doesnt play computer games. Comput...
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Line 1, column 95, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ere is a child, we can find rarely, who doesnt play computer games. Computer games is ...
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Line 3, column 161, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...e the game it was a total waste and you dont need that game anymore, so buying a gam...
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Line 3, column 484, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...aily work, what they really need to do. Secondly, computer games are addictive a...
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Line 5, column 561, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...computer game cause harm to their mind. Also playing too much computer game can harm...
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Line 7, column 151, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this can' or 'those cans'?
Suggestion: this can; those cans
...me contents exploit contents and seeing those can actually harm a young mind. Some people...
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Line 7, column 189, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...g those can actually harm a young mind. Some peoples argue that playing computer gam...
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Line 7, column 561, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... some peoples say it has a good effect.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, still, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1872.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64516129032 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.26190603889 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473945409429 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 576.9 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.5079799742 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5263157895 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2105263158 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.73684210526 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 3.85842293907 363% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262216835019 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103075587807 0.076458572812 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0467456778856 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182431302663 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0449868977529 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.03 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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