TPO-11 - Independent Writing Task Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?Use specific reasons and examples to support you
In modern life, Internet have become the biggest information source in the world. Some people said that Internet provide people with a lot of valable information. In opposite side, some researcher believed that access to much information creates problems. In my oppinion, I am better convinced with the latter by the following reason.
The first idea came to my mind is the effect of bad imformation in Internet to human. For adults, bad information can make user easily to get exposed to society's vices like drugs, terrorist. Take ISIS as an example, they usually post their videos on website in order to recruited people to their organization. For children, they have no idea what information good or bad for them. So when they access to websites to find information, children can find wrong information or bad information that impact to their cognition. By the large , Internet may have a lot of valuable information but it also have a lot of bad information that can cause problem.
Secondly, people are easier fooled by fake news. Because people usually believed that information which they getted in Internet is reliable and good. So there are a lot of organization or some people have created fake news about politics. Take Viet Nam as an example, a lot of people have post fake news on their Facebook about Viet Nam government which make few Vietnamese believed that information is true. In addition, people can buy fake equipments, fake medicine ,even fake house. There are a lot of circumstance that people have been buy fake medicine and equipment which they found on Internet.
In conclusion, the effect of the bad information and the fake news are my reason for my oppinion. It is highly recommended that people should carefully consider my writting before read some information.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1501.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 300.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00333333333 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77934329923 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 212.727598566 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496666666667 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 486.0 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.5643467159 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.3888888889 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6666666667 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.16666666667 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253607453414 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0972560471999 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0788208954188 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177365664365 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0996644804634 0.0645574589148 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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