TPO 34Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on a cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site. Use specific reasons and examples t
The issue of whether educating children is a more difficult task compared with the past aroused much controversy among people of different ages and different perspectives. Definitely, some people if were asked would agree with the statement that in the modern world educating children due to the overuse of technology is difficult, while others have a negative attitude toward this point of view. As far as I am concerned, I am in agreement with the former group. In the following paragraph, I will shed light on the argument to advocate my view.
The first vital point to be mentioned is that in recent decades, the academic course materials become tougher than the past as they included the latest result of researches in various sciences. Therefore, students should dedicate most of their time to grasp the concepts and knowledge. However, they spend an enormous amount of their time by surfing on the Internet, chatting with their friends, and playing online games. Consequently, the result of their education is not satisfying. Many surveys determined the rate of addiction to the internet is increasing among children at the school-age which can prove the main reason for the escalating trend of exam failures between children at school.
In approaching this issue, apart from the reason given above another reason that deserves some words is that accessing to the new technology especially social media at the low age has a negative influence on children’s outlook toward the education. many of them discuss with their parents they don’t need to be successful students at school if they want to be a useful person in the future because through this media they become aware many of affluent and outstanding people have never received any college degree. Hence, the media set a bad example for them and they assume educating waste their time. As a result, they ignore their assignments and lessons at school.
By the way of conclusion, based on the arguments explored above, I am of the opinion that in today’s world educating children is more difficult in comparison to the past as they do not allocate sufficient time to absorb their lessons because they addicted to the internet and cellphone. Moreover, social media encourage them for being a prosperous and successful person they don’t need to be good at school.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, hence, however, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, while, apart from, as a result, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1963.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0987012987 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76323842463 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535064935065 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 613.8 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.8160223433 48.9658058833 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.866666667 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6666666667 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242523567959 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0765650665077 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0510774799272 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149552105069 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0248341178461 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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