TPO 40: Some parent offer their school age children money for each high grade mark they get in school Do you think this is a good idea Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Encouragement is considered as one of the outstanding merits bringing about stunning outcomes. The question is whether parents should dedicate financial gifts to their children for high grades or not. Although I am a tough opponent to spoil the offspring by offering too much prizes, I am proponent to give them money for their success in studies. The major contributors to my opinion are the fortified impetus toward learning, the shifted perception of good deeds and the realization growth about the value of money.
As a threshold matter, those students applauded for their progress in studying are thoroughly motivated to continue their education. In spite of the fact that education requires a continuous effort to obtain a valuable objective, incentives stimulates pupils to follow their route in their studies. For example, my class who had high marks, progressed day after day on account of remarkable money he received from his parents as a reward.
Furthermore, it is reward that illustrates the value of an activity. Being rewarded by their parents, youths will remember the necessity of studying in their whole life. Accordingly, whenever they grow up and enter the university, they still try their best to acquire good grades. In other words, the belief that studying hard is a virtue, sticks to their mind forever.
Last but not least, what students learn more is the value of money they are prized. The school-age children understand how much received money deserves since they preserved a long time to obtain the good grade. On the other hand, those students who are offered daily salary from their parents without providing any especial accomplishment are not able to distinguish how difficult every dolor is earned. Therefore, they easily spend the money without paying attention to the efforts behind the scene.
In succinct, parents are recommended to award their children by money in case they achieve a reasonable mark. The behavior has some benefits like making them more motivated, teaching them the importance of studying and informing them about the real value of earning money.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 272, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
... to spoil the offspring by offering too much prizes, I am proponent to give them mon...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, furthermore, if, so, still, therefore, for example, in other words, in spite of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1771.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 340.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20882352941 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72572488057 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.594117647059 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.0173983574 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.176470588 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.82352941176 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255736280692 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0774330794402 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0633356783281 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13388640413 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0328375065241 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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