TPO-44
some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork.
It is no secret to anyone that children are one of the most significant segments of society. Their parents have a tremendous and profound effect on their children's progress and development. So it is critical that busy parents spend their limited free time with their children. Although some people argue that parents should involve themselves in their kid's schoolwork in their free time, others assume that it is better to use their time to play games or sports together. In my perspective, I agree with the latter group for a couple of reasons.
One remarkable reason is that psychologists believe that playing can boost children's social skills, and it is profitable not only in their current time but also future. The statistics show that when parents spend their time to play with their children, their kids realize that they are the first priority of their parents. Therefore, it helps them to achieve prosperity and raise their productivity in their life. For instance, one of my friends is a manager of a big and famous company. I vividly remember that when we were classmate at school, she always played at home with her parents. Although her parents worked out, they never evaded their parental responsibility, and they strived to spend their leisure time to play with their children. Therefore, playing leads my friend to be always independent, and she passed her life barriers tactfully. So playing with kids can have a noticeable effect on the children's characteristic.
Second, if parents use more time with their offspring, they can know each other better. So their relationship becomes close and friendly, which help them to share their emotion and feeling with each other. For example, my father always played with me when I was a child. However, he was obliged to work hard, and he did not have enough time to be with his family, he always met his parental commitments. He was not only a father but also a close friend for me. I consulted with him in all situations and circumstances, and he never left me alone in hardship and difficulties of my life. Furthermore, parents can strengthen their family connection if they allocate their time to their family.
In conclusion, however, some busy people prefer to spend their limited time to help their offspring in their schoolwork, others believe that it is better to play with their children. I argue that playing can be more efficacious because it improves the children's social behaviors and skills, and helps them to be closer and friendly with their parents.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...boost childrens social skills, and it is profitable not only in their current tim...
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...closer and friendly with their parents.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, second, so, then, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 82.0 43.0788530466 190% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2106.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94366197183 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69480296393 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.457746478873 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 624.6 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.3907370493 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.7272727273 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3636363636 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.13636363636 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.337087568237 0.236089414692 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117703298969 0.076458572812 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0925603016511 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.25008338976 0.150856017488 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.043874109642 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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