TPO15.In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
During the last decades, the digital revolution has brought economic prosperity to the societies. On the other hand, it is an undeniable fact that more facilities are available in a community, more money people should spend to meet their needs. As a result, the ability to manage money is crucial for individuals’ survival and success. One of the heated debates in this realm is that whether should learn to manage their own money at young ages. Although there might be some counterexamples, I would argue that it is essential for children to learn to manage their own money to become financially responsible adults. Following reasons will further elaborate on this issue.
The most prominent point to be mentioned is that everyone can learn a skill during the time and it is not an overnight achievement. In fact, time and experience are the best teachers to form a person's personality. Parents should give different opportunities to their young children to evaluate their abilities and broaden their range of knowledge. By way of conclusion, children who are practicing to manage their own money would be financially responsible adults in the future. Consider the following example which can shed some light on this issue. A friend of mine was given a monthly allowance, and she was supposed to manage that for a specific time. After some years, we started studying electrical engineering together in another city. Unfortunately, I always had difficulties to pass a month with the money that I had, however; she was able to cover her living expenses with the same amount of money. The reason was that she has learned how to handle her budget.
Furthermore, children particularly those from affluent families often cannot understand how hard making a living is. They are financially dependent on their parents while life is not like that all the time. In other words, children should be learned to save their money for a rainy day. For instance, a few years ago I used to get money from my father, and there was no limitation for me. As I became independent, I was struggling with financial problems all the time since I was not able to set my priorities, and spent the vast amount of money on unnecessary stuff. It took a long time for me to be accustomed to this new situation.
To wrap it up, based on the ideas were presented above I believe that it is vital for young children to manage their money on their own to become accustomed and experienced for their future life. However, an important issue that must be mentioned is that we cannot use this idea as a prescription, and more research should be conducted to answer this question precisely.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 194, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...erience are the best teachers to form a persons personality. Parents should give differ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, so, while, for instance, in fact, as a result, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2215.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 454.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87885462555 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83717968786 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515418502203 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 705.6 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.12678395 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.3043478261 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7391304348 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.60869565217 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.32876559529 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0911609299726 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0947070479813 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213824849811 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0794710828928 0.0645574589148 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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