TPO1
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
While some people think that the government should allocate much financial support to the classes and libraries, on the other extreme of the rope, others deeply believe that the government should pay more attention to the sports and social activities and these social issues should have equal or more budget among others. Actually, they think that sports and social activities play an important role in society especially students life and can improve their mind, brain, and spirit. They claim that no one can turn a blind eye to the significance of the social activities and sports in blooming and thriving students’ performance and efficiency. Although both sides take their own positions, from my point of view, the latter group carries more weight. In the following paragraph, I will explain my reasons.
First and foremost, the efficiency of the students’ performance is a very important factor that should be pay attentioned by the mangers of all colleges and universities. Social activities such as joining the different sports teams can decrease the students stress and improve their physical and especially mental interactions. Social clubs and various sports teams create a fun atmosphere that students can release their negative energy, attract positive energy, and be relaxed there. Furthermore, they can find new friends and learn them valuable experiences that may help them decrease their concerns. Therefore, investing in the student’s social skills and abilities is a logical idea that impacts on the different dimensions of student’s life.
The second reason coming to my mind is that today many managers deeply believe that social activities are more important than libraries and classes. They deeply believe that social activities such as effective communication to other people, having team spirit, and team working play a crucial role in student’s future. They think that students will find various job opportunities in future and without proper social interactions can’t select the best position in a society. Therefore, the government allocates much budget to establish sports teams such as football and basketball teams to encourage students to assign more time to sports and improve their social skills. Empirical research on various students has proven that the most students in a college are weak in a social interaction while that college has a big library and various books about social skills. The result showed that the social communication and team working are the most important factors that society will expect the students have.
To put everything in a nutshell, a broad look over to the main points and discussions reveals the fact that the government should pay more attention to sports and social activities in order to teach students to interact other people properly, improve their self-confidence and teamwork. Actually, the government should prepare students to accept social responsibilities in future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 371, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...dents to accept social responsibilities in future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, furthermore, if, look, may, second, so, therefore, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 13.8261648746 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2527.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 461.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.48156182213 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87940997956 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477223427332 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 754.2 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.3062144905 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.388888889 100.406767564 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6111111111 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55555555556 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181011241192 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.066747212027 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459680859356 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127191410811 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0493448929918 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 11.7677419355 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.8 10.9000537634 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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