TPO20 – Independent: A/D? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.
The question of wheater that successful people try new things or not, has always been a controversial topic among people wih varied points of view.
In one side, some people are strongly convinced that people who are successful try not to take risks. Their assumption is engaged in a dispute with the biliefs of some others affilianting to another group, and substantiating the view that, if people know how to do something well, they will be successful.
I firmly assert that, the second view carries more weight. my rationals for this point are elaborated and exemplified as follows.
The fisrt thing to be mentioned is that, I think, if people are intersted in to do new thing,and they take risks, they will put themselves in challenging situation, and learn new things so they will be able to adapt with new things. they can improve their abilities and behaviors, so in this level, if they face difficult problems, they can solve their problems in a good way. Let me illustrate this with an example, I remember, when I was a hight school student, our history's teachers was too advanture, and he enjoyed to learn new things, in my opinion he was too knowledge and successful. one day when I had a problem to learn a new equation about my chemistry exam, he explaind me in a simply way. I surprides because I did not have expectation from hystory's teacher.
The second point that I would like to mention is about this people. In my view, people who do new thing, have a wide mind, and they have different aspect frome the world because they try new things, and they improve their mind. they have a lot of experience, so they can be succcessful in their live betther than the other people. In addition, they can have influence on other people. For instance, I had a classmate who he had a typical job with a normal salary, but one they he decided to change his job, I did not agree with him, and I thought he could not find a good job, but when he left his job, the day after that, a good position in a rich company withh hight salary was offered to him, so I have found take risks are useful for us since then.
All in all, I try to learn new things and not to be afraid of risks, and I think we can learn a lot of new things in all our life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, second, so, then, well, as to, for instance, i think, in addition, in my opinion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1871.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48681055156 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48997322182 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.482014388489 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 556.2 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 10.0 1.86738351254 536% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.4013370536 48.9658058833 164% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.9375 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0625 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.3125 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277891813014 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0889943974439 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0867740918826 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14574269282 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0791121997541 0.0645574589148 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 70.47 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.06 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.