TPO25 – Independent: A/D? Young people nowadays do not give enough time to help their communities.
During the last decades, the digital revolution has altered several aspects of our societies, as well as, our personal lives. As a result, societies have been experiencing significant concerns about the effects of modern life on the relationship between people within a community. One of the heated debated in this realm is that whether young people, nowadays, do not allocate enough time to help their communities in different activities. Although there might be some counterexamples about this claim, I would argue that young people do not contribute a lot to their communities compared to the past. Following reasons will further elaborate on this issue.
The most prominent topic to be mentioned is that the rapid development of technologies cuts us off from our communities ranging from the smallest one which is our family to the largest one which is the society. People, particularly younger ones tend to spend most of their time on social media, the internet, messaging services, and they separate themselves from their real world. Consider my own experience which can shed some light on this issue. A few years ago, when it was not possible for everyone to have a personal cell phone, I used to spend some time on social activities such as attending a club close to our previous apartment. It was an enjoyable experience with our neighbors to revolutionize our small community together. However, now, I neither visit my neighbors nor do any social activities with them. In fact, now, I allocate my time to follow different campaigns on Facebook and social media rather than being in a real community.
The second rationale behind my idea is rooted in the fact that modern life has changed the way young people think. As a result, they do not feel responsible for people around them anymore. Our responsibilities, now, is restricted to our personal lives, and we believe that our life is not affected by our communities. In other words, people who live in a community should be considered as a whole, but we live in an age in which people put a premium on their own demands, lives, and concerns.
To wrap it up, based on the ideas which were presented above, I strongly believe that, by the advent of technologies, young people do not devote enough time and energy to their communities and societies. The modern era has transformed the way they think and cut them off from their real world. Let us hope that young people start coming back to their communities in order to improve their society by taking advantage of their potential.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, second, so, well, in fact, such as, as a result, as well as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2124.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 431.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92807424594 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79370966857 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522041763341 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 666.0 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5310310914 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.789473684 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6842105263 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.89473684211 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238529514263 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0748372386452 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0773555495674 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167797753215 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0713305108076 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.