TPO44-Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer
There have been some moot points regarding the best way which parents can spend their free time with their children. The question of whether the best way is to have fun or have academic activity has aroused as a subject of controversy among academicians. When it comes to my position, by weighing up the pros and the cons, I strongly subscribe to the point that doing funny activity is the best use of this spare time. I have some reasons, the most outstanding of which will be explicated in the ensuing paragraphs.
The first reason worth discussing here is that during a week children overwhelmed and inundated with many school activities and assignments, therefore, they tend to have funny leisure time with their parents. To be more specific, have fun playing sports and game relieve their tension and stress and help them to enhance their learning ability. As a case to the point, I vividly remember when I was a student at primary school, my parents worked hard to buy a house. As a consequence, we had not sufficient time in tandem. Every weekend my father took me to the picnic because he claimed that this action leads to alleviate our stress and bring joyful sense to me. I remember every week on the first day of the week I had great energy which gives rise to many high scores in that era. My personal experience competently corroborates to the point that having fun is the best way of spending free time.
By the same token, another paramount reason to be mentioned here is that children have great respect and serious behavior toward their parents because they do not see their parents very much these kinds of behavior is normal thus, spending free time in which sport and game activity bring more intimate between children and parents. My personal example demonstrates this reality, two days ago I watched a documentary program on the BBC channel which shows an experiment about relationships among children and parents. In that program, scientist test two group. In one group children had not any funny activity with their parents and in another group, they spend free time in funny activity. The result showed that the second group has a warm relationship with parents which stem from their free time. My personal example shed some light to the point that spending free time in entertaining activity bring various benefit to children.
According to the aforementioned reasons, I reiterate that parents should spend their free time with their children in pleasure activity. These funny time not only relieve many stresses and tensions from children but also help them to have great intimate with their parents.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 118, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: Whether; The question whether
...nd their free time with their children. The question of whether the best way is to have fun or have aca...
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Line 3, column 554, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'group' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'groups'.
Suggestion: groups
...ts. In that program, scientist test two group. In one group children had not any funn...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, regarding, second, so, therefore, thus, by the same token
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2185.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87723214286 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53464416397 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484375 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 668.7 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.8398926239 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.0 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5789473684 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15789473684 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36059804554 0.236089414692 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123717937324 0.076458572812 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0840842691261 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255704290629 0.150856017488 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0613516428034 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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