TPO47- It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life
Over the past few decades, the issue of whether it is benefical to know about world events despite the lack of any effects on our daily life has received a great deal of attention from people and societis. Although some may argue that the knowing the events around the world can be time-consuming, I as well as many others believe that the advantages of the knowledge outweight it disadvantages and it could enhance the general information of the people, and the following explanations will further elaborate on this perspective.
First and foremost, a paramount reason why it is better for the people to perceive what is happening all around the world is that by having this information they could be helpful for other people who are in others regions. For instance, in 2010, a tsunami had crashed the indonesia and brought about plenty numbers of deathes. People all around the world sent them enormous aid packages due to to the reason that indonesians' people had not even basic requierments for their lifes. This help was the result of the attentioning of the people about to the events that happen all around the worlds and not only their countries.
A further reason for this view is that being familiar with the affairs which happen throughout the world could be beneficial for their general information. This means that people could be familiar with other countries and either their cultures or their political views. As a matter of fact, this knowledge would help them to improve their sights and thei children's perspectives as well due to the reason that they could receive adequate information from the news. Take juveniles as an example, if they want to know about some countries for their assignements or for their personal improvement, their parents who are familiar with the other regions events would be helpful for them.
Finally, it is occasionally said that the one of the basis of the human being life is depend on the communication with each others. In fact, people should have some topics to be able to comminucate with each others. As a result, the worlds events are a reliable source for people to have communication with their colleagues or their relatives. In addition, they would be able to participate in general associations like red-cross or political parties since they have information about the world's events.
In brief, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, I can draw the conclusion that being familiar with events that happening all around the world is significant chiefly due to the reasons that this knowledge not only enhance the role of the people in helping each others during disasters but also could augment their information about the world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, may, so, well, for instance, in addition, in brief, in fact, in general, as a matter of fact, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2258.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 450.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01777777778 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7242849328 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.446666666667 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 679.5 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.5623696072 48.9658058833 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.533333333 100.406767564 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.0 20.6045352989 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.86666666667 5.45110844103 181% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204136150712 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0833119627828 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0577656997017 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137966832611 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.050735285078 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 11.7677419355 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.43 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.