using technology such as computers or televisions of of studying at traditional schools. Which would you prefer?
In the modernized world, parents are always in a dilemma about how to let children to get a best education. Certainly, some people if asked would agree with the statement that studying at home will be convenience , while others would mention that the question depends on a great deal of factors. As for as I am concerned, I adopt a firm position that although Internet and television-based may sound tempting, they will never replace actual schools.
First of all, it is important to consider that making friends is a advantage for the future. Certainly, some people may think that people can make friend in the Internet. However, in most cases people making good friends are through attending traditional school. To illustrate that idea let’s consider the following example. I remember that my best friend and I aways keep contact each other, even we graduated from high school. This in turn we can look after each other in the future. As you can see, having friends can get many benefits.
Equally important is the field of learning. Of course, for some pupils studying at home, they can choose the field that they want to study. However, for most pupils, they need to study all the field that teachers teach them. Take a case of CJ, a cousin of mine whom I have known for 10 years. She has studied at home for 6 years since she was 9 years old. She always regret the major she chose, because she is too young to know what she really like. This experience taught me that studying at traditional school can help you find the field you like.
By the way of conclusion, based on the argument explored above, I am of the opinion that in most cases there will be a lot of advantages for students who studying at traditional school. Not only will make a lot of friends but also learn a lot of things. That is why everyone should go to the school instead of studying at home.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 91, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...ilemma about how to let children to get a best education. Certainly, some people ...
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Line 1, column 213, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...hat studying at home will be convenience , while others would mention that the que...
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Line 3, column 66, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...tant to consider that making friends is a advantage for the future. Certainly, so...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Equally,
...ving friends can get many benefits. Equally important is the field of learning. Of ...
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Line 5, column 368, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'She' must be used with a third-person verb: 'regrets'.
Suggestion: regrets
...s since she was 9 years old. She always regret the major she chose, because she is too...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, really, so, while, as for, of course, by the way, first of all, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1547.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 337.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59050445104 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4794541048 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.563798219585 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 459.0 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.0426369499 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.35 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.85 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157154572116 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.044576400166 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0558683587644 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0957149756175 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.040866938819 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.01 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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