What change would make your hometown more appealing to people of your age? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In recent days, even with the literacy rate going high throughout the world, incidents like eve-teasing, acid attacks, rape etc. are still in the news. Even after conducting repeated campaigns to promote women empowerment throughout the globe, we cannot unsee that women of my age still find it difficult to travel alone due to lack of security. Hence, to make my hometown more appealing, I would like to make it more secure than it is already. In what follows, I'll note down some points that explain the reasons behind my stand.
To begin with, over the last decade, we have seen a steep rise in the number of female working professionals. Often they require to engage themselves in late-night shifts. If not, these women of my age do tend to visit the nightclubs or just party till late at night on weekends. To ensure their safety while they return home, a sufficient count of cabs and female cab drivers need to be employed. Let's take the example of a rape incident that took place in the area of Park Street in Kolkata a few years back. As the women did not find herself a taxi to hire, she could not refuse the offer when a group of men she met from the night club offered her a ride home. She was raped and abused inside the car.
Secondly, some people do find it intimidating to approach police officers regarding their problems, especially the women who are of my age. This problem could be solved if female police sergeants are appointed in large. Women in the city would feel comfortable seeking help. Also, this will open up good employment opportunities. For instance, had a woman been harassed on the road, it can be quite uncomfortable for a shy or introverted woman to explain a male police sergeant about the details of that incident.
Last but not least, most streets and dark alleys could be equipped with CCTV cameras. This will not only ensure the safety of women in my hometown but as well as reduce overall thefts and robbery attempts. Let's consider an incident of acid attack in Delhi. Because of the CCTV footage that recorded the face of the criminal, justice could be served to the victim.
To conclude, there's no denying that undertaking the development of a new amusement park or setting up multiplexes or just elevating the lifestyle of the people in the city could superficially seem to attract people of my age. But a town that is safe and secured is appreciated and desired by every single human being, including my generation. Nothing can be more appealing that a town possessing the least risks to human life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, well, while, for instance, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2107.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 450.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68222222222 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54768740451 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588888888889 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 672.3 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.3367635277 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.7916666667 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.75 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.75 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0950447705671 0.236089414692 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0241506643977 0.076458572812 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0411732725315 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0510557092612 0.150856017488 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0366086024046 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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