When schools do not have enough funding or teachers, some people think physical education classes should be cut, while others believe that courses in art and music should be eliminated first. Which do you think is preferable, and why?
When schools face financial struggles, one important decision that has to be made is to decide what can be done to reduce costs. Many people are tempted to cut classes that are not perceived as important for the development of the brain. Some people feel that music and art should be the first courses that should be eliminated, while others think that physical education is not important and can be cut out. Personally, I believe that art and music classes are important and should not be eliminated. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, both art and music are manifestations of a society´s culture. By studying these classes, young students learn about the importance of creativity and the impact it has on people. For instance, when I was in high school, I had the opportunity to learn how to use local musical instruments from my country like the zampoña, which is an instrument from the andean communities. By learning about the different instruments I had a better understanding about the cultural differences between regions in my home country. If I had not taken music courses at high school, I would probably not be aware about the musical diversity of my country. Therefore, I believe that learning about art and music are essential in order to understand about a country´s culture.
Secondly, art and music promote imagination and creativity. It is important that young children are exposed to many creative activities so they properly develop their minds. For example, my younger sister had art classes since she was in primary school and there she discovered her passion for art. My sister was a shy kid at that time and she found that she could communicate with others through her drawings. Painting and drawing became the ways she could express her imagination and feelings. Now, she decided to pursue studies in graphic design as she enjoys finding ways to communicate information through innovative design and art. Both art and music help children to have fun and further develop their imagination.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that art and music courses should not be eliminated. Both courses help children to have a better understanding of their culture and it also boosts their creativity.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, as to, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1916.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01570680628 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84223280673 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492146596859 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 594.0 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.4564778702 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.8 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29579514793 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0967237930642 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124801694154 0.0737576698707 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192205781001 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.133313693277 0.0645574589148 207% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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