When schools do not have enough funding or teachers, some people think physical education classes should be cut, while others believe that courses in art and music should be eliminated first. Which do you think is preferable, and why?
In a inadvertant situation, when schools have scarcity of funds or teachers, they have to make harsh decisions. Sometimes, they have to cut down the physical education classes, while in other cases some believe in eliminating art and music should be the ones whose classes should be cut. In my opinion, its the art and music classes that should be cut in order to compensate for the fundings or to face the scarcity of teachers. In the following paragraphs, I present few justifications to bolster the stand taken.
I believe in sustaining the physical educations classes, while cutting off the music and art classes as I myself am a fitness enthusiast, though it might be considered a prejudiced decision. But let me justify myself. I think, whether you are a fan of physical activities and education, you should not take it in a non-serious manner. As our physical fitness should be among our utmost priorities. It is required for every other task that we perform. So, rather than keeping it aside, we should consider it as an mandatory routine, as it is one of the vital needs of our body. Whereas, we could compromise on other hobbies and skills, as we could live without it for a while. But, this must be kept in mind that, here effort is not being put to demean the music and art but instead, intention is to emphasize the importance of physical education.
Moving on, another reason of me supporting physical education over music and art is that such skills can be learnt from the internet or by other means if the candidate is self-motivated enough. But physical education is the one that must be learned, practiced and performed in presence of professionals only as it involves risks of injury in most of the cases. So, instead of leaving the responsibility of physical education on children incase the physical educations classes are proposed to being cut, we should rather let them perform and learn them in presence of professionals only.
At the end, I would like to conclude by saying that, in a scenario, where we need to make this tough decision, we must take stand in favor of physical education. Although, I would like add an additional opinion at the end that student's opinions must be taken into account. In case majority of students are ardent followers of art and music, it would'nt make sense sustaining physical education classes in this case.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, thus, whereas, while, i think, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1964.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80195599022 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7893420976 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506112469438 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 624.6 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.8224949964 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.111111111 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7222222222 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.16666666667 5.45110844103 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.406147743208 0.236089414692 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122231792595 0.076458572812 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108095018264 0.0737576698707 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.250161937073 0.150856017488 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125874786725 0.0645574589148 195% => OK
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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