Which one of the following values is the most important to share with a young child (5-10 years old)?
• being helpful
• being honest
• being well-organized
In today's modern and sophisticated world, educating children needs a considerable amount of effort. In this connection, learning some subjects plays a vital role in their lives. Although some people believe that parents should share being helpful with a child, many other people hold the view that it is beneficial for children to learn honesty. There is still the third group who concur with the notion that being well-organized should be shared with children. I agree with the first group's vision, and I will analyze my reasons throughout this essay.
First, helping children become independent in their lives, so it is crucial to share this feature with them. To be more specific, children can learn many skills when they help others; hence, they can handle their lives in the future without any supports. According to my own experience, when I was a kid, I helped my mother in house chores, leading to gaining many abilities. When I came to university, I should live in dorm rooms, but the rent for them was high, and I could not afford them. However, there was a cheap dorm room in a good location, but it did not include services for cleaning a room, so I should clean it myself. As I learned how to cook, sweep, and wash, I rented the room, thereby saving a considerable amount of money to buy a valuable book and materials. On the other hand, my classmates who did not learn housework and were dependent on others could not buy books because they should allocate a wealth of money on dormitories rent.
Second, when children learn how to being helpful, they will be thriving in their business. To elucidate, people prefer to work with one who is helpful to rely on them in difficult situations. For example, when I was a kid, my teacher told students that they should help other people. Accordingly, she asked us to help the school's workers by helping them to carry objects. Two years ago, when I was at university, I saw the unfamiliar man who carried a host of books, but other students did not pay attention to him; however, I decided to help him. After I carried part of the books for him, I realized that he was a new principle of our university. He was so glad that I helped him and offered me an excellent career in his office because he believed that I was a reliable person supporting him to deal with his difficulties.
To conclude, while there are several arguments on each side, I profoundly believe that being helpful is the behavior that should be shared with children. Not only do children who are helpful cope with their challenges, but they also find a satisfying career.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...but they also find a satisfying career.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, hence, however, if, second, so, still, third, well, while, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2149.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 459.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68191721133 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60141849169 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516339869281 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 647.1 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.9294147824 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.333333333 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8571428571 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.71428571429 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211496448183 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0718724109325 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0924743202161 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162491230976 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0702051475206 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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