Why do you think some people are attracted to dangerous sports or other dangerous activities? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
People want to explore new things in life, they like to take a risk and wants to be different from others. Sports is the most important part of our lives. the efficiency of a human is measured by the degree and the quality of its sport. Nowadays, dangerous sports or dangerous activities have become popular all over the world. Especially young people offer the thrill of facing difficult challenges and overcoming obstacles for two crucial reasons.
In the first place, some people play dangerous sports for passion and fame. They don't want to discontinue their passion and love towards dangerous sports. Nowadays, people record whatever sports they play and post it online for others to watch and enjoy. and when the people doing that strange and odd thing they will become more famous among their friend's circle, and people start recognizing them. But it would result in violence towards other the people and they become a depression.
The second reason, people like to challenge themselves physically and mentally by playing dangerous activities, They like taking a risk, they want to be physically strong and want to overcome their inner fear and weakness. For instance, I had been to watch indoor mountain biking competation, in that young people do dangerous tricks, whether in physical and mental. on another hand, some people it is a job to them and gain a lot of money and become a professional in sports. For example, Football, swimming, hockey, basketball and so on. They want to take a risk, make money be popular.
In conclusion, people play dangerous activities to overcome fear and weakness from something. some people taking a risk to be happy after doing that. Money is very important would to lead the people to practice dangerous sports.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1473.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 294.0 407.700716846 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01020408163 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54665613075 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527210884354 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 438.3 618.680645161 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.020658752 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.8333333333 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3333333333 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.88888888889 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24612444531 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0894488627883 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0628446101673 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177055428065 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0408492379945 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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