Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answe
At the turn of the new century, with the development of humans modern society, more and more people tend to explore new things specifically young people to impact for themselves and their society too, Actually, people's attitudes toward this issue ate varied from person to person. Some believe that in these days young persons do not impact on the important decisions in the society, Although many would argue that the old people are the most important factor in nation building, In my opinion, young people has a far greater impact on society. I would suggest two reasons based on my general facts in addition to my personal experiences to support the argument.
The first aspect to point out is that no one can cast a shadow of doubt on the fact that in today’s sophisticated world we live in, the roles of young people in the society are very crucial. Cooperation of young people for making significant decisions can have a great influence not only on their destiny but also on the next generations. A vivid example can be to shed light on what has elaborated above. All of the young people have a positive energy and several activities to achieve their goals and effect on their society. take a youth trying to graduate from a university Due to the fact that, nowadays, a job market is very competitive and difficult, he has to find a profitable occupation in order to make more money. Therefore, his part of the mind is allocated to seek a job and another part to Participates in other activities to support their country and have an audible voice in their country. On the contrary, elder people like my father always come from their works not involved in the political problems which are related to the government or sports. As it turns out; the young people often spend time making a good effect on the significant decision making of their society.
To begin with, the most striking reason why I support this view is the fact that young adults are now more involved in social issues than the past. By the advent of electronic devices and evolvement in technology, the young are more in touch with each other and as it is said the world changed to “a global village" which everybody knows about others. In this regard, the contribution of social media such as Facebook, YouTube, Twitter, to name but a few, should not be neglected on account of the fact that the society's issues are spread via these media as soon as possible.
In conclusion, based on the argument above, I strongly believe that the young people play an important role to change their society at a present and in the future. The young are always the precious treasures of a society which should be utilized in order to reach success. but we don't forget many benefits quickly stem from our older people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, so, therefore, as to, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2311.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 489.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72597137014 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55267973313 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515337423313 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 733.5 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.2675594117 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.941176471 100.406767564 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.7647058824 20.6045352989 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202299391781 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0634369255153 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0418517408037 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11615146636 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326713335665 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.75 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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