Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.
Many young people have dreams that they want to change the world, including me. But, disappointingly, I have to say, it is difficult to struggle for that and the efforts you made would likely to become in vain.
First of all, as the hundred years development of society and technology, the society has become more and more solid and stable than before. A young man, with no power and wealth, is like an ant, would not heard by others.
When I was in the high school, I felt it was not fair that all the students had to be checked by the only examination, which would decide whether you can be accepted by the universities. I thought, why not there were not other exams or universities can check students by themselves. As I thought about this, I wrote some messages to the education committee, obviously, there was no reply from them. As a little student, how could I dream to get reply from the big ones? The ones have position, power and the only thing they are thinking about, is to protect their power and prevent it from dropping it.Who know your people? Who care for you? Who care for a little high student. I cried for justice for equality but who care? But how many other students they are struggle for an equal for education but they can't! What can one do? The one is nothing, especially in today in which media and resources controlled by the power.
But, I convince, there is always a way to make that once you insist in it. As the development of technology in Internet, we are lucky to have more approach to loud our voice. As many traditional media are controlled by centralized office which could easily affected by the relevant, we now have many decentralized stages like Zeronet or steemit. We can leave a message at the system forever and without attacked by anyone. Furthermore, many countries have change to opening in government affairs and could easily access with Internet. Moreover, as the development of blockchain , we could even become a member in DAO, decentralized autonomous organization, we can give our voice and decide affairs fairly by vote.
The future is becoming brighter and greater.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 207, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'hear'
Suggestion: hear
...r and wealth, is like an ant, would not heard by others. When I was in the high s...
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Line 5, column 603, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Who
...r power and prevent it from dropping it.Who know your people? Who care for you? Who...
^^^
Line 5, column 643, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...Who know your people? Who care for you? Who care for a little high student. I cried...
^^^
Line 5, column 808, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...gle for an equal for education but they cant! What can one do? The one is nothing, e...
^^^^
Line 7, column 578, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...reover, as the development of blockchain , we could even become a member in DAO, d...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1758.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70053475936 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65823466902 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53743315508 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 558.9 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.9011557564 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.7142857143 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8095238095 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.61904761905 5.45110844103 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.114539055997 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.034054148426 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0402405578612 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0807943223459 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0373010299974 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.68 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.