Beliefs about elephants

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Beliefs about elephants

The reading passage states three beliefs about elephants which attract people's interest for a long time. However, the professor argue that none of these beliefs can be regarded as the truth

For the belief that elephants are aware of approaching death, the professor stresses that the reason why some old elephants leave herds and die along with the river is that those elephants are willing to eat some soft foods which can only be found along the river and then die there eventually rather knowing the approaching death.

For the opinion that elephants can represent by art, the professor asserts that these elephants capable of drawing things are trained to picture fixed objects instead of being talented to represent objects by art.

For the view that elephants are afraid of mice, the professor contends that elephants presents those actions like keeping away from groups of mice because most of them are not familiar with mice. And those elephants in zoo which are familiar to mice will not presents those behaviors when meeting mice.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...alented to represent objects by art. For the view that elephants are afraid of m...
^^^
Line 7, column 260, Rule ID: DONT_NEEDS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'present'?
Suggestion: present
...zoo which are familiar to mice will not presents those behaviors when meeting mice.
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 260, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'present'
Suggestion: present
...zoo which are familiar to mice will not presents those behaviors when meeting mice.
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 22.412803532 67% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 30.3222958057 66% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 5.01324503311 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 878.0 1373.03311258 64% => OK
No of words: 173.0 270.72406181 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07514450867 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62669911048 4.04702891845 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.26941745938 2.5805825403 88% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 145.348785872 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.578034682081 0.540411800872 107% => OK
syllable_count: 263.7 419.366225166 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 13.0662251656 38% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 21.2450331126 160% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 114.833096275 49.2860985944 233% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 175.6 110.228320801 159% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.6 21.698381199 159% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.4 7.06452816374 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.332426325565 0.272083759551 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.175668085332 0.0996497079465 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0971131652907 0.0662205650399 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193432239711 0.162205337803 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0917186353038 0.0443174109184 207% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.8 13.3589403974 148% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.43 53.8541721854 84% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.0289183223 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.78 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 63.6247240618 47% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 10.7273730684 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.498013245 149% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.2008830022 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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