TPO-24 - Integrated Writing Task
The reading passage and the lecture both discuss a fascinating topic pertaining to T. rex's fossils, which is a dinosaur that was appeared in 70-million-year ago. The author of the passage gives details about the fossil. The lecturer casts serious doubts on the claims made in the article.
First of all, the author of the passage claims that the hollows in the leg bones show the presence of blood vessels. This point is challenged by the lecturer. He says that many bacteria colonized into those hollows. So, the soft organic substance inside the channels is the residue left by bacteria. Furthermore, he points out that it is not identical that this substance indicates that the animal has blood vessels.
Secondly, the reading passage discusses that the fossil contains some spheres in the leg bone of the animal. He argues that it clearly indicate the presence of red blood cells. This argument is rebutted by the speaker. He acknowledges that the iron material into the spheres did not indicate the presence of red blood cells. He elaborates on this by mentioning that other fossils which are from the same place did not contain red blood cells. Therefore, this iron material is something else.
Finally, the reading article posits that the presence of collagen in the fossil of the animal's leg bone. The professor, on the other hand, mentions that collagen in any animal remains only 1000 yr in their body, but the fossil is 70-million-years old. He puts forth to the idea that human skin contains collagen, so the collagen in the fossil may be of one of the researchers who hold the fossil's bone. Clearly, a disparity exists between the reading passage and the evidence exhibits by the lecturer.
In conclusion, the professor effectively casts doubt all the claims from the article.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 221, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, in conclusion, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 22.412803532 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 30.3222958057 125% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1500.0 1373.03311258 109% => OK
No of words: 302.0 270.72406181 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96688741722 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61665677538 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 145.348785872 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506622516556 0.540411800872 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 456.3 419.366225166 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 3.25607064018 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 13.0662251656 153% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.3976113741 49.2860985944 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.0 110.228320801 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1 21.698381199 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9 7.06452816374 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.27373068433 281% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.371797846922 0.272083759551 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101329952738 0.0996497079465 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0830910732677 0.0662205650399 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166292072848 0.162205337803 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108653146771 0.0443174109184 245% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 13.3589403974 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 53.8541721854 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.0289183223 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.95 12.2367328918 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.42419426049 98% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 63.6247240618 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.7273730684 51% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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