TPO-46 - Integrated Writing Task In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which informa
The passage and lecture represent the opposite side of the topic; turning from traditional way of medical data storage and a modern one by digital intruments.
First, while the text believe that electronic records could help to reduce total cost, the professor reflect an disagreement. She states that such information eventually demands an extra store pay cost since sometimes these datas treated as emergency backups.
Second, it is possible to prevent human errors by computers based on text.Yet, the lecture have been claimed that digital tools could not compensate for poor hand writings or mistakes of doctors. Because these illigabe writings could transfered correctly to computers by staff.
Finally, despite the passage try to show the significant role of data digitalization in research, professor illuminate this idea by the matter of privacy. She meant that it is not applicable to access patients information without getting permission based on restict US regulations.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 110, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...educe total cost, the professor reflect an disagreement. She states that such info...
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Line 3, column 74, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Yet
...human errors by computers based on text.Yet, the lecture have been claimed that dig...
^^^
Line 3, column 196, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...r hand writings or mistakes of doctors. Because these illigabe writings could transfere...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, second, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 10.4613686534 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 12.0772626932 33% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 22.412803532 54% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 30.3222958057 73% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 834.0 1373.03311258 61% => OK
No of words: 151.0 270.72406181 56% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.52317880795 5.08290768461 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.50545371207 4.04702891845 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84210141599 2.5805825403 110% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 145.348785872 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.728476821192 0.540411800872 135% => OK
syllable_count: 264.6 419.366225166 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.55342163355 116% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.23620309051 36% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 13.0662251656 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.7039908942 49.2860985944 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.142857143 110.228320801 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5714285714 21.698381199 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28571428571 7.06452816374 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221016662097 0.272083759551 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.082313358174 0.0996497079465 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.055823680934 0.0662205650399 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106089079426 0.162205337803 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0411219921956 0.0443174109184 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.3589403974 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 53.8541721854 62% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.0289183223 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.2367328918 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.74 8.42419426049 127% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 63.6247240618 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.7273730684 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.2008830022 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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