TPO-52. Integrated Writing Task. Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they challenge the specific points made in the reading passage.
The main idea of both the passage and the talk is about the possibility of asteroids colonization. In the text, the author presents three reasons that the asteroids would be actually the best colonization option. The lecturer challenges all the arguments mentioned in the passage and believes that none of these ideas is practical.
Firstly, the author states that asteroids have lower gravity than Moon or Mars since they are smaller than planets. Therefore, the landing and taking off are very easier than other planets. Conversely, the lecturer brings up the idea that although low gravity is very important to landing and take off , it has certain risks for astronomers such as losing muscles mass or negatively effect on their bones.
Moreover, the author asserts that there are some valuable elements and precious metals which are very rare on Earth such as gold and platinum. Thus, these valuable metals could support projects. The speaker, on the contrary, points out that there are some issues that should be considered about the precious metals. First, it is very challenging and expensive process to transfer the mentioned metals to Earth, so they will lose some of their profits. Second, if these metals will be transferred to Earth, the price of these elements will reduce because of more supply.
Eventually, the reading passage holds the opinion that reaching to asteroids is easier than Moons since they sometimes are very close to Earth. The lecture, on the other hand, posits that although asteroids are close to Earth, they are far away from Earth in most of the times such as Mars. Therefore, it is very difficult to come back to Earth, and it may takes a great deal of time.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 302, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
...s very important to landing and take off , it has certain risks for astronomers su...
Line 7, column 110, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER
Message: The adverb 'sometimes' is usually put after the verb 'are'.
Suggestion: are sometimes
...teroids is easier than Moons since they sometimes are very close to Earth. The lecture, on th...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, conversely, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, such as, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 10.4613686534 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1416.0 1373.03311258 103% => OK
No of words: 285.0 270.72406181 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96842105263 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45743509305 2.5805825403 95% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 145.348785872 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533333333333 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 433.8 419.366225166 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.0414136681 49.2860985944 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.142857143 110.228320801 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3571428571 21.698381199 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.21428571429 7.06452816374 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 4.33554083885 208% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.073839912196 0.272083759551 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0264481761511 0.0996497079465 27% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0287566864999 0.0662205650399 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0413178981389 0.162205337803 25% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0195398450842 0.0443174109184 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.3589403974 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.2367328918 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 63.6247240618 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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