Some people claim that a nation's government should preserve its wilderness areas in their natural state. Others argue that these areas should be developed for potential economic gain.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
The topic raises a controversial issue of whether the nation's government should protect their wilderness areas in its natural state or not. Indisputably, they can use those areas for building a factory or a high tech mall thorugh which they can make a lot of money that can further be used for their own country. Nevertheless, securing wilderness areas reduces the chances for extinction of various specious and thus should not be used for economic growth of the nation. Thus, instead of using those areas for country's financial growth, government should kept those areas as natural and pollution free as possible in order to maintain the environmental balance.
Firstly, the preservation of wildlife species is crucial in order to secure the biodiversity of ecosystem. Their survival provides a good ecological health to the planet and enhances the age of huamans. For example, various animals provides us natural food which are good for health. Furthermore, a lot of medicines derrived from the animals. For instance, milk given by cow and goat is very healthy and effective for human body. Moreover, the venom from viper is used to treat various neurological and heart diseases. Thus, wildlife should be preserved and maintained in a healthy environment so as to enhance the biodiversity and maintain good healthy life for humans.
Secondly, creation of factories and high tech malls in place of wilderness areas not only endangered the species, rather it increase the amount of pollution and global warming which further enhances the possiblity of natural disaster and human diseases. For example, the smoke came from chimneys of factories may cause sinus problem amongst people who live in nearby places. Additionally, the leakage of drastic gases like methyl isocynite from factory could cause a great human damage by genetically destroying them and their future generations and would even sometimes cause death. Therefore, the construction of factories not only reduces the atmospheric and ecological balance which were kept from wildlife areas, it would effect the human life drastically.
In conclusion, although a good government should possibly considers the idea of making their country better by enhancing their economy, creation of factories and other economically profitable firms could not only engendered the species but also causes great destruction to nature as well as human life. As long as some areas are concerned, wildlife areas can also make money from tourists and other people and thus could be served for the economical purpose as well.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 55, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...es a controversial issue of whether the nations government should protect their wildern...
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Line 3, column 595, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...and maintained in a healthy environment so as to enhance the biodiversity and maintain g...
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Line 5, column 125, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'increases'?
Suggestion: increases
... only endangered the species, rather it increase the amount of pollution and global warm...
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Line 5, column 466, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[5]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'great human damage'.
Suggestion: great human damage
...thyl isocynite from factory could cause a great human damage by genetically destroying them and thei...
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Line 5, column 728, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[6]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
...were kept from wildlife areas, it would effect the human life drastically. In concl...
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Line 7, column 59, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'consider'
Suggestion: consider
...hough a good government should possibly considers the idea of making their country better...
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Line 7, column 214, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'could' requires base form of the verb: 'engender'
Suggestion: engender
...mically profitable firms could not only engendered the species but also causes great destr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, as for, as to, even so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 58.6224719101 68% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2167.0 2235.4752809 97% => OK
No of words: 407.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32432432432 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78227946629 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520884520885 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 680.4 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.9628879541 60.3974514979 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.470588235 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9411764706 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4117647059 5.21951772744 219% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285916833561 0.243740707755 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.093394595832 0.0831039109588 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0792581622295 0.0758088955206 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176953926129 0.150359130593 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0855951800061 0.0667264976115 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.8420337079 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 100.480337079 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.