Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The argument posits that the deer population has been declining in the recent years and attributes this decrease to the melting of ice caused due to global warming. However, there is a necessity of stronger evidence to prove this fact.
The passage states that the deer populations have been declining. However, it does not mention whether the population has been decreasing in entire region or just one particular area. There might be a possibility that the deer population has simply migrated to other islands due to the paucity of food in their native place.
Even if we accept the fact that the population has been decreasing, it cannot be attributed to global warming due to the limited evidence provided by the passage. Although it is a widely known fact that global warming is the cause for the melting of glaciers in the Arctic region, we cannot blatantly posit that the ice between the Canadian Arctic islands has melted due to global warming and hence conclude that the deer population has decreased. There could be a possibility that the excess heat might simply be fatal to the deers and the reduction in ice may have nothing to do with the decrease in their population.
There may also be a possibility that the food crops might be infected or some wild poisonous weed is growing unchecked in the region. Another possibility could be an increase in poaching and deer hunting which could have rendered the deer population to decrease.
Hnece, there can be limitless reasons for the decline in deer population from the limited facts provided by the passage and the actual reason cannot be determined without a deeper insight into the matter. A further study needs to be carried out on the patterns of ice formation in that region and how global warming affects it. Also, the growth of plants, on which the deer feed, needs to be checked and any unwanted crops, if found, need to be eradicated.
The reason for decline in deer population cannot be ascribed to global warming without a deeper knowledge and study of the region where the deer population once thrived.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 356 350
No. of Characters: 1691 1500
No. of Different Words: 155 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.344 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.75 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.475 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 127 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 54 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.429 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.225 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.401 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.627 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.126 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1727.0 2260.96107784 76% => OK
No of words: 356.0 441.139720559 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85112359551 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53133842471 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.457865168539 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.6015538686 57.8364921388 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.357142857 119.503703932 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4285714286 23.324526521 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.71428571429 5.70786347227 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149988034378 0.218282227539 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0582161202608 0.0743258471296 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0453822661541 0.0701772020484 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0834444322653 0.128457276422 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0367765968342 0.0628817314937 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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