Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Educational institutions, such as community colleges and universities, are a rite of passage for many to advance or start their career. The statement affirms that these educational institutions have the responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed in. Contrary to the statement, I believe that educational institutions do not have the responsibility to change the mind of students, but rather guide them and give them the resources and tools necessary to make their own life choices.
Firstly, the responsibility of educational institutions should lie in best preparing students to be successful in whatever field they choose. Critics of this point might say that it is hard to choose a career path and that many students regret their choice of university major, therefore the school should have a say in where the student might fit best. While this critique can have the student’s best interest in mind, if the university tried to sway the student into a certain career path, the consequences could be far worse than imagined for the university and the student. For example, let’s say a student that is an art major is deemed unqualified by the professors and is told that they would succeed in mechanical engineering; the student obliges, but then ten years down the line, they are miserable as a mechanical engineer and wish they could have been an artist instead. In this scenario, the student does not make a lot of money, therefore they are unable to donate to their school. what if this student was the next Picasso? The student would become rich and be able to donate money to the school of arts.
Secondly, dissuading students is biased, and a system of any kind, especially and educational system, needs to be unbiased in every shape and form. Regarding the original claim, how is potential success measured? Another reason why I disagree with the claim is because there is no empirical way of knowing what student should be dissuaded. One might say that grades and GPA could be metrics that show if students are qualified for their specific field. it is erroneous to think this because the lives of students come in all shapes and sizes. if a student is working two jobs on top of going to school full-time, then there is the probability of them struggling to keep high grades lower. The student should not be swayed from leaving their field of study just because of low grades because said student can have an exponential passion for their field of study but are unable to put in enough hours of studying because of personal reasons.
Overall, if the student is logical, and they see that their grades are suffering then they will make the decision to switch majors. if the student’s grades are struggling for reasons other than personal, then they probably are suffering mentally and emotionally. In other words, they are unhappy in their field of study. if the student switches major, it should and will come from them, and whatever they choose, the school should only be there to support them and do everything in their power to make sure the student is happy and succeeds.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while, for example, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.5258426966 169% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2636.0 2235.4752809 118% => OK
No of words: 536.0 442.535393258 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91791044776 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81161862636 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70369745922 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472014925373 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 813.6 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.2562531917 60.3974514979 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.523809524 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5238095238 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61904761905 5.21951772744 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243155680781 0.243740707755 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0827922390335 0.0831039109588 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102106793882 0.0758088955206 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16667077056 0.150359130593 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0789444195845 0.0667264976115 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.5 11.8971910112 139% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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