The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In this argument, the author states that a reduction in mopeds rental will reduce the amount of accidents between mopeds and pedestrians. This recommendation is based on evidence and assumptions the author states but they are not sufficient enough to support the claim.
The first assumption made by the author is that a reduce in mopeds during the summer months will decrease the overall amount of accidents. This assumption is based on the evidence that the population of the island raises to 100,000 during the summer. The author should answer the question of what the normal population of the island when it is not summer. By showing that there is a large increase during the summer the author would be better able to support the assumption that a decrease in rentals will decrease accidents. Also the author should provide information on how many accidents occur during the summer months compared to the other months of the year. If there is a dramatic increase in accidents during the summer this would better support their argument.
Moreover, another assumption the author makes is that limiting the number of rentals will create a 50% annual reduction in moped accidents. This is based on the evidence provided by another town, Seaville, that instated the same law and got a 50% annual reduction in accidents. The author should answer questions about how Seaville and Balmer islands are similar to better support that the law will get the same result in Balmer as it did in Seaville. This would help to prove that the predicted result of the recommendation will be accurate
In addition, the author makes the assumption that limiting the number of rentals will decrease the amount of accidents. To prove that this is accurate the author needs to answer the question of whether most mopeds on the island are rented or owned. Citizens who own mopeds may also be responsible for accidents. If the author can prove that most accidents happen with rented mopeds this would strengthen their reasoning behind limiting rentals.
In conclusion, the author makes the argument that a reduction in moped rentals from 50 a day to 25 a day will decrease moped accidents by 50%. To better support his argument the author needs to answer the questions above and provide the evidence needed to structure this claim.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- duplicated to argument 1
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 388 350
No. of Characters: 1890 1500
No. of Different Words: 137 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.438 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.871 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.493 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 161 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 89 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.556 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.798 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.394 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.603 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.119 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 49, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...t assumption made by the author is that a reduce in mopeds during the summer months will...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 527, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ase in rentals will decrease accidents. Also the author should provide information o...
^^^^
Line 3, column 665, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...mpared to the other months of the year. If there is a dramatic increase in acciden...
^^
Line 7, column 179, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
... is accurate the author needs to answer the question of whether most mopeds on the island are rented or...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 313, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... may also be responsible for accidents. If the author can prove that most accident...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, so, then, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 16.3942115768 152% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1934.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 388.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98453608247 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55381030461 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 204.123752495 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.360824742268 0.468620217663 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 586.8 705.55239521 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.1689225047 57.8364921388 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 113.764705882 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8235294118 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.29411764706 5.70786347227 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168402640264 0.218282227539 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0744617182754 0.0743258471296 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0607585981943 0.0701772020484 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.098281466067 0.128457276422 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0601911127425 0.0628817314937 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.32208582834 87% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 98.500998004 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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