Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
It is said that in the education system students should be dissuaded from the following fields of study in which they are not successful. I agree with this statement to some extent.
The education system is one of the most important parts of each society, and it should be valued. A part of the success of each society depends on its educated people. A country in order to be successful needs different fields of study in universities. Some of them have more demands, and some of them not. For example, all societies need doctors, engineers, professors, artists, sportsmen, lawyers, and sweepers. Some of these jobs have more demands just because they have a high social level. We can see that fewer people tend to be artists or sweepers. Therefore, some people believe that educational institutions should discourage students from majors in which they can not be successful. These people claim that students who study medicine or engineering are more successful in the future and they have a better salary and situation in their future working life. So, teachers should encourage students to pursue such fields of study. These people believe that pursuing such fields of study also, societies can have more progression compared to other countries.
However, I believe that the interest of students in the education system should be respected. Each student has different talents and interests, and when a society is successful that its students are passionate about what they are studying. For example, one student likes to be a good painter. She or he cannot be a good doctor or engineer. So, when they are forced to follow such fields, they cannot be successful in their future working life, and they are forced to sacrifice their talent. Therefore, in my view with such students, societies cannot get progressed. To have a better society, educational institutions should let students pursue what they like because in each society, each field has its own merits, and I believe that the ability of students should be considered. They only should guide students in order to choose a better way.
To summarize, educational institutions to some extent have this responsibility to dissuade students from the fields in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, therefore, for example, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1898.0 2235.4752809 85% => OK
No of words: 371.0 442.535393258 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11590296496 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72786134934 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 215.323595506 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.43935309973 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 582.3 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.6554650355 60.3974514979 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.2727272727 118.986275619 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8636363636 23.4991977007 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.59090909091 5.21951772744 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.423233430897 0.243740707755 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127104467702 0.0831039109588 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.153019023103 0.0758088955206 202% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.367928271975 0.150359130593 245% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.180822198028 0.0667264976115 271% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 100.480337079 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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