Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There can be varying opinions regarding whether a person would benefit more from traveling in his own country or from traveling abroad. I firmly believe that it is more advantageous to travel in one's own nation due to several reasons which will be elaborated in this essay.
First and foremost, the culture of a nation and its history must be well known to a person especially one who has enough resources and the will to travel. Knowing about the diversity of the people living in a country and their lifestyle, traditions, major occupations, historical monuments and their influence on the nation itself is crucial for a citizen to be aware about. As a responsible and politically and historically aware citizen a person should visit not just the famous monuments and tourist attractions in their nation but also the ones which are culturally significant and lesser known. For instance, when I was a child I travelled to a historically significant places known as Humpi and Badami in the Karnataka state of India where only people with interest in the history of India visit. There I came to know about the vast expanse of an old empire which had built thousands of stone carved temples with so much details that many stories from the epics of 'Mahabharata' and 'Ramayana' were carved out of single stones hundreds of years ago. Most people do not visit this place because it does not act as a tourist spot which provides entertainment options to attract people. But my family got a chance to physically see the wonders of the past and the history connected with them.
Secondly, it is important to support the tourism industry of one's own nation by visiting places in the country rather than visiting foreign countries only. As the daily bread for many families depends solely upon the tourism industry in many countries citizens should regularly visit even those places which do not offer much options or are expensive and posh. This will help the economy of a country by bringing up the per capita income above the poverty line. Also this will make sure that a considerable slice of the country's valuable money is contributed towards the income of some people leading to more economic equality and a better future for the tourism industry families. As these families are stuck in the vicious cycle of poverty they do not have the opportunity or the resources to access education and a chance at a better life or even a better tourism service. Therefore, in-land tourism will help achieve better tourism standards and also increase the literacy rate.
Thirdly, the standards of the tourism industry when improved due to the reasons previously mentioned will attract people from foreign nations and also more people would be attracted towards the world heritage sites in a country if the overall service quality of the industry is improved. This will have deep positive effects on the nation's political and economic condition. For instance, the seven wonders of the world tend to attract large foreign populations to their home country which helps the local economies improve along with foreign relations due to the good and polite hospitality provided.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...ousands of stone carved temples with so much details that many stories from the epic...
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Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...it even those places which do not offer much options or are expensive and posh. This...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...r capita income above the poverty line. Also this will make sure that a considerable...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, well, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2632.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 530.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96603773585 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79809637944 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58526371298 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 855.9 618.680645161 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.5970160187 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.222222222 100.406767564 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.4444444444 20.6045352989 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.83333333333 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25069036303 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0798429290648 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0769052262124 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175195199482 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0726743498904 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 11.7677419355 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.14 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 86.8835125448 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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