Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment, and not enough time on more serious duties and obligations. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Most people agree that they do not have time for serious duties and their responsibilities. Also, they say that it is because of a lot of pressures in thier lives. Personally, I believe that we spend too much time on our hubbies, and we have not blamed ourselves because we do not have any other choices. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following.
To begin with, new form of working life, called 9 to 5 working style, makes us valnarable against many situation in our life and affect our mental manner. In fact, humans do not have enough free time to spend for their hobbies. As a result, they have been more irisponsible towards many serious duties. My experience is a compelling example of this. I have worked in a company as a full-time epmloyee since 2019 september. They do not give me any resting time that I can go to vacation ot do whatever I want. I always feel sick and try hard to find moments to be relaxed, even if I have a important thing to do such as caring my baby or fixing problem in my house. Therefore, they cause me to be lazy and irisponsible. I do not blame myself but instead, I blame my managers who do not consider my interests and not give any free time to me.
Furthermore, governments have a crucial role in this issue. They have pushed people to be more productive and work as much as possible because by this way, they can achive more profit from community and improve the level of society. In fact, they sacrifize happiness and health of the members of society to make society powerful in the future. Many people believe that they do not allow to force people to work for obtaining something that their do not want them. For instance, ministry of new sciences in my country has imposed a great deal of pressure to my company to finish our projects for city's lights system in minimum time. This pressure is directly affect in my co-workers lives and my life as well. Therefore, people should force their governments to consider limits of their society and try to pospone big projects, and help them to be more free time in their works.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that people spend too much time for their hubbies instead of their duties. This is because of the role of governments and the new form of working time that makes our life misrable.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 99, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun situation seems to be countable; consider using: 'many situations'.
Suggestion: many situations
...king style, makes us valnarable against many situation in our life and affect our mental manne...
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Line 2, column 587, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...d moments to be relaxed, even if I have a important thing to do such as caring my...
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Line 3, column 387, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'forcing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: forcing
...y people believe that they do not allow to force people to work for obtaining something ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, so, therefore, well, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1896.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 423.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48226950355 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52232679603 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479905437352 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 609.3 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.3601982542 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.1818181818 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2272727273 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.90909090909 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193358884933 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0644022394725 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0618439030892 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142633814031 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0245641235442 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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